Concetta Neville

Rookie - 35 Points (August,13,1988 / Coral Springs FL.)

Bullies - Poem by Concetta Neville

They would laugh, they would point, they would hurt and would tease.
They would do this all, and more to me.
They would make up things that weren’t true.
They would make me look the biggest fool.
They would be the ones to push and shove.
They would be the ones to make me hush.
They would be the ones to sneer and glare.
They would be the ones without a care.
They would be the ones I’d come to loathe.
They would be the ones without a soul.
They would be the bullies, and me, i'd be prey.
They would make me suffer every day.
They would be the ones to snicker words.
They would be the ones to make me hurt.
They would be the one to judge my cloths.
They would be the ones to turn me cold.
They would be the ones to ruin my name.
They would be the ones who called me lame.
They would be the ones without a heart.
they would be the ones to tear mine apart.
They would be the ones to come to me.
they would be the ones my nightmares seek.
They would be the ones behind my back.
They would be the ghosts that haunt my past.


Comments about Bullies by Concetta Neville

  • (4/30/2009 8:42:00 PM)

    Concetta, this is topic that many can relate to, a friend I was in school many years ago with, ended his life because of bullying, its something that haunts many peoples lives, you've expressed this very well......

    Stay strong, you beat it....10
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  • (4/18/2009 11:45:00 PM)

    Very intense feelings expressed here, Concetta. It's a good piece of work.

    And do you know that you have used the rhetorical device called anaphora in this poem? Anaphora is using the same word or words at the beginning of each line, which here, of course, is 'They'd' (except for the line starting with 'Instead') . However, please don't be offended, but I might suggest changing 'They'd' to possibly just 'They'. It would mean making other modifications to adjust to that, of course, but I think it might be less awkward looking and sounding, and might open up other powerful ways to express what you want to express. Just a thought.

    Regards,
    Michael
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, April 18, 2009

Poem Edited: Sunday, April 19, 2009


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