Callgirl Poem by Herbert Nehrlich

Callgirl

Rating: 2.5


I saw her shadow first,
that Sunday afternoon,
'twas luck the bus was late
there was no better sight
the length of Hennepin.
A man, looked like a gigolo
now grabbed her arm,
and fragments of loud words
came flying over shrapnel-like,
when sudenly he slapped her face
I did what needed to be done.
His shirt was cheap it seemed
it ripped as I used martial arts
admired by a crowd and....her,
the nurse was very kind later that day,
she told me that the pimp had,
within seconds summoned friends,
and that there had been ten.
My wallet later became evidence
in State against Georgina,
callgirl with a lot of friends.

This poem was written by Stefan Reitz
of St. Paul Minnesota.
I posted it under my name
to encourage him to post it at all.
I think he may not become a member.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Matthew Pearson 27 April 2006

You have not been put in the back of a truck, yet? Where to begin? This is absolutely wretched. Incidentally, they spell the word 'suddenly' with a Double-D just like the cup size of 'Georgina the callgirl'. Feel free to make up the spellings of words anytime you fancy. It enlivens the tedium for the reader.

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Mary Nagy 28 April 2006

I think this is wonderful....very much puts the reader there. I hope your friend does choose to become a member, I would be interested to read more from him. Sincerely, mary (What a nice friend you are Herbert!) :)

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kskdnj sajn 28 April 2006

A strong statement of an experience.. well done Stefan. Keep writing. :) Angie

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Gina Onyemaechi 28 April 2006

But our Stefan shouldn't let such venomous creatures, who are by far in the minority on this site, stand in his way of an audience who might help him better his poetic art. G.

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Herbert Nehrlich1 28 April 2006

Thank you, Gina. I met Stefan during my undergrad years in the Twin Cities and we had an absolute ball. He introduced me to McDonalds which were at the time 22 cents. I became addicted to Strawberry Shakes. He did not want to hear the ridicule after posting his poem and as you can see the first reaction was just that. I think it's JC writing under Pearson's name. I didn't think it was bad and told him so. Best H

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Gina Onyemaechi 28 April 2006

This resonates with such nastiness and horror that I feel positively sickened...which makes it a strong piece of writing. It conveys so well the sordidness of this world, and makes a reader stop awhile to think on this. What's to stop you posting independently, Mr Reitz? Regards, Gina.

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