Crimson Carpets At Dusk Poem by Elizabeth Sheaffer

Crimson Carpets At Dusk

Rating: 4.0


You're sitting on the couch, watching TV.
Wishing that you could be watching me.
Wanting me only to exist.
Needing nothing save one last kiss.
Why couldn't it have been someone else?
You cannot imagine how it must've felt.
Did I go to Heaven, or was it Hell?
You need to know which way I fell.
That way you can arrange for us to meet.
When you get to sleep your eternal sleep.
You'll never let go; I'm the love of your life.
You're even beginning to fondle that knife.
They tell you to move on; start anew.
They tell you that is what's best for you.
But you know the truth; they're all insane.
One little stab could kill your pain.
'I'll do it, ' you think, 'No one will care.'
'Maybe she'll be waiting for me there.'
You slump in your chair as the world turns black.
Crimson stains the carpet; you can't take this back.

(December 2005)

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Not a member No 4 04 February 2007

The psychology of this one is rather tricky, but the poetry is effective in its portrayal of scenes of desperation - on both sides. It's stark, disturbing and moves the reader to try and penetrate the motives at work. It draws us in effectively - regardless of how we feel about the subject matter - and that is a measure of the poem's power. jim

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Melvina Germain 03 January 2007

Uh huh, this could be made into a movie, is there a second series or are you like me and keep your fans hanging. I like this poem, it is a dark poem yes, but I believe tells a story that could be realistic in this day and age. A sad picture painted certainly, I'm not sure what happens on the other side once one's death has been self inflicted, I wonder. Would they be cast into a deep dark hole, or would they have an opportunity to redeem themselves. Since it is an uncertainty, I think we should not ponder any thoughts of suicide. Melvina

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Jim Foulk 01 January 2007

a very different kind of poem that is for sure. would make a good movie series.

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Joshua Fegley 30 December 2006

Dark poem...I like it. Should have used the bath tub...easier to clean up. Laters...

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