Alone In The Crowd Poem by Elizabeth Sheaffer

Alone In The Crowd

Rating: 3.2


Sitting at a desk in a brightly lit room,
Surrounded by people, but still so alone...
Fighting a feeling of impending doom;
A chill in the room that cuts to the bone.

I've not seen your face in many a day.
The thought of you makes my heart ache so.
Missing your voice; it' so hard to be gay.
Happiness escapes wherever I go.

Dining alone in a quiet cafe'.
Delicious food still seems so bland.
Brown briefcase; a nice attache'.
Fighting to meet life's many demands.

I'm trying to pull myself together
Before I completely fall apart.
Battling to stay above the weather
That brings a chill to my lonely heart.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Greenwolfe 1962 22 August 2008

This is a very dangerous poem for the writer. I cannot recommend it. But that isn't the half of it. This poem is a near disaster from a technical standpoint. One verse should be removed completely because it isn't needed. Two others are not as focused as they need to be. I can't say more. I just hope it goes for repairs. GW62

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Jasbir Chatterjee 01 October 2015

very nice poem...but this too shall pass, don't worry...congrats on being poem of the day!

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Veeraiyah Subbulakshmi 01 October 2015

the melancholic mind of a person, who has been removed from the comfort zone. The feelings are very true, but we can overcome it in a matter of a few days, months and years, what I have to write after reading this poem! ! If i had read it during the days of imperfection, i could have been severely demotivated and might sing along with you dear, now I recite your poem as the incident of the past! ! That is the nature! ! well expressed as I had felt the chill in bones too! ! !

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Lisa Swearingen 03 February 2007

I love this. This is exactly how I feel at times. Thank you for your comment on mine. It actually made me feel less alone in a crowded room.

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Not a member No 4 04 February 2007

The climate of love can be very cold indeed when the heart is longing in vain. This is a strong piece that works as a whole to create the pain and loneliness of separation very effectively and poetically. The images and situations portrayed all sharpen the sense of a painful severing. jim

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Amitava Sur 01 October 2015

A very heart wrenching poignant write where you perfectly expressed your loneliness with those elaborate lines.Wishing you to have the courage to fight it out.

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Edward Kofi Louis 01 October 2015

Nice work with the muse of loneliness.

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Bharati Nayak 01 October 2015

Loneliness depicted in some beautiful lines- - - - Dining alone in a quiet cafe Delicious food still seems so bland Brown briefcase and nice attache Fighting to meet life's many demands - - - -When loved one remains away for long loneliness creeps in and life seems to lose its charm in spite of all available comforts.

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Kinyua Karanja 01 October 2015

The feeling of loneliness is awkward you feel it in a crowd of people, the alienation of minds and thoughts on what is going on around you leaves you alone, Awesome poem

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Ratnakar Mandlik 01 October 2015

Profound feelings expressed in very lyrical muse. Be always blessed.

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