Day Off Poem by Young Poet

Day Off

Rating: 5.0


How fruitless I have toiled these sullen hours.
The only art I know is servitude-
To Labor, and in exchange of my time
Procure what we possess: this morning bread,
Your second skin, this leather-covered seat,
This tin roof beneath the battering rain:
And all the mute and deaf and blind witnesses
Of this naked moment I share with you
Before this random peter-patter ends
And the avenging sun takes it away-
Away from the poetry of your love,
Back to the bosom of my poverty.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Lady Grace 05 July 2009

this is so nice..if this will be fixed well, this is a perfect poem..grace

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Catrina Heart 05 July 2009

A pretty nice poem for a start fine poetic pictorial illuminated....CT

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Carol Gall 06 July 2009

great start i like this a laboror very good

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 06 July 2009

A DAYOFF which was depicted in a stylish writing, akin to a 'day of a lifetime'. Salamat po'.

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Obinna Eruchie 12 August 2009

This is beautifully written, well done, Y P.

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This poem is really good keep writing poems

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Fay Slimm 11 July 2009

This verse grabs the reader's attention from line one - - the expressive phrases are indeed well thought out - - keep writing do.....10 from Fay

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Heather Hill 08 July 2009

I like this one a lot please keep writing u are very good

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Preety good for a starter ur awesome keep riting

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