JENIE FRANKSAY

Rookie - 191 Points (07 august 1996 / samastipur)

Departure - Poem by JENIE FRANKSAY

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your heart and you,
made of stone.
went away
leaving me alone.

not even said 'goodbye',
not even once.
you wanted to go away
far from my glance.

there is a void,
there is my voice,
which asks you,
'why you made this choice? '

your train has arrived,
and will depart soon,
i will be left behind
tearful and loon...


Poet's Notes about The Poem

let me know how this poem is.. please.. i need your feedback to improve myself.
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Comments about Departure by JENIE FRANKSAY

  • Shania K. Younce (10/5/2013 4:19:00 PM)


    I thought the poem to be well put. I like your style. I wish I knew better formations of poetry my-self. Well done. (Report) Reply

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  • (6/24/2013 11:23:00 AM)


    you talent is hats off
    nice poem young poet
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  • (6/24/2013 4:41:00 AM)


    so sad and nostalgic write
    you are damn talented
    having a bright future here
    gud luck
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  • Vishal Sharma (6/24/2013 2:21:00 AM)


    nicely done
    i like one thing in your poem
    the endings...
    they are simply awesome, amusing, suprising, nostalgic, and sometimes terryfying, ! !
    keep penning sister...
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Poem Submitted: Monday, June 24, 2013

Poem Edited: Monday, June 24, 2013


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