Wali Jamali

Rookie (1981 / Karachi)

'Deprivation' - Poem by Wali Jamali

A long time ago
I pledged to hand-over my body
To waves of mighty river Indus.

I wished
The river that blessed
The body of a sage
Shall embrace me.

When i want to die
I have no pure place to jump into.

Where should i go?
The river has dried up.
How shall i be
Able to take my last eternal bath.

Comments about 'Deprivation' by Wali Jamali

  • (8/24/2008 3:15:00 PM)

    its nice poem..very deep infact like sea :) (Report) Reply

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  • (8/16/2008 12:13:00 PM)

    Awesome.. to say the least (Report) Reply

  • (3/2/2008 10:42:00 AM)

    It's marveleous to write for an aime, respects and regards for your concern Xoubiya
    :) keep it up dear
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  • (2/28/2008 8:04:00 AM)

    In general I like the poem, there are some stylistic and linguistic things that you can consider, but I think that it may be a translation thing. The mood of the poem is poingnent and real and that is a good thing. My best advice to you, is to read, read, read! Read a lot of poems and keep writing. Good luck to you.
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  • (2/28/2008 4:11:00 AM)

    wonderful poem, xoubiya (how do you pronounce your name!) .
    we in india share your agony because the picture is very same here.
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, February 19, 2008

Poem Edited: Sunday, April 6, 2008

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