Tonight,
darkness enveloped
my whole existence.
I felt,
being in a better position,
and satisfied that nobody
peeps into my perfect world of misery.
It as i, myself,
would have been ignorant
of the fissures drawn within me.
Well captured, but still has a soupcon of mystery
a well-said poem. cheer up zoobi, no world is perfect, least of all the world of misery. somewhere, some how light of hope will peep in. all the same a lot of promise with in you.
nice poem but at this age don't feel so low and frustrated. life is too hard and bitter. look forward with faith and hope. good luck and keep writing.
talks about that one dark corner in the inner cloister but hy remember that the rest of the inner abode is rich in hope which will help you cope
wali this poem is full of pain and hurt that is oozing out of every word you have used. may God Almighty take away and sooths your pain and give you peace of mind and soul. Ameen take care and pray, for prayers is a wonderful weapon.
A beautiful write so close and yet so far, not easy to comprehend regardless of how far from truth one is, to see it a light is needed!
waa deeply touched.....short lines with hidden myths..........sebastine
simple and yet it conveys an intricate emotion. loved it!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Simplistically thunderous, talks about simmering fear, anxiety and other negativities in cauldron of life Regards, rehan