Rating: 5.0
A swinging female dancer
With divine gestures
Leavesmarks on the sand dunes.
She touched -
It felt like nothing.
She moved -
It tapped not.
She swung-
It produced no sound of whiff.

She was an opaque
So marvellous
So composed
So ryhtematic.
Divinity - her display
Silence - her clamour.

A shadow of a bruised
Painfully crafting divisive lines
To earth the cracks so wide open.

An attentive spectator murmured
your are singing deity - a Nirtiki-
Dancing like standing daffodils
On the field front
Like a profound shadow of insubstantial pageant.
Monday, December 1, 2008
Sebastine Humaemo 14 January 2009
picture runs in my mind while reading your lines.....a dance said by words...much creative and charmin....wonderful write.......mere daffodil....sebastine.....
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Sreelekha Premjit 14 January 2009
The picturisation of the dancer is enthralling.. I liked the line 'silence her clamour' a great deal... very beautiful..
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Sadiqullah Khan 05 January 2009
The theme of a dancing girl is always enthralling, , treated here with very finre words and stanzaic pattern, , , lovely read, ,10
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Surayya Abbas 01 January 2009
shadows keep on dancing in the poem. it reminds me old civilizations. Nicely penned.
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Chitra - 29 December 2008
fine verse, you made your beautiful words dance to the tunes of your exquisite pen
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Anjali Sinha 28 December 2008
beautiful poem-the whole one was like a singing nartaki to me well penned-10 anjali
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Seema Chowdhury 20 December 2008
very nice and descriptive poem. take care
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Indira Babbellapati 17 December 2008
is earth the dancer here?
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Dr Hitesh Sheth 09 December 2008
Beautiful write.......... You made words dance to your tune.
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Omar Ali Sabar 06 December 2008
xoubia, a remarkable write indeed. I like the way you have split the person in your poem by portraying the outward beauty and a whithering inner self... A Ten Spot..
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