Diamond Dance. Poem by Fay Slimm
Diamond Dance.
Atop the lake today splayed a dancing
Net of flickering sparkly bright gems, the sun
And breeze playing duet, I stood entranced
As water teemed alive. Light, having fun
With liquid glass, created diamond gleams.
Amid such jiving mass, with frenetic
Performance this dance was supreme, in themed
Revue, with jewel-studded cast. Stars let
Loose brilliant glitter in the fastest fling.
With million winking movements quick silver
Flashed with gold, and for a while the zinging
Air went wild around this speed-display, willed
By cosmic joy. Then breezes died, the sun
Went into hiding, and the dance was done.
An exquisite piece Fay....your choice of words and imagery are amazing. The last two lines I agree with everyone are just brilliant. this is one of my favourites 10+++
your description had the heart dancing a duet with nature! ! Simply superb! you could perhaps work into smaller lines.....a small suggestion! For it was a read rhyme lacking But imaginations! wow! simply superb! I admire you for your thoughts!
.This sounds like a Ballet.Swan Lake...with all its refinery..can see the images well written and joy to read...10++ Sue
Fay...that was just great-you explained how I feel when I dance [15 yrs of comp ballroom dancing] it was just magic nuff said ++++10 regards uavnicescotch
I know I have commented once but I love this poem fay going to add it to my Favorites.
A dazzling display of a diamond dancing with amazing images and scintillating words to create a spectacle of sheer brilliance! 10 Karin Anderson
wow..this is such dazzling and amazing one indeed..I enjoyed it very much....too bad it ended short...thank you so much for this one... best wishes with love shan
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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'By cosmic joy. Then breezes died, the sun Went into hiding, and the dance was done.' These conclusive lines are amazing,10++