Tuesday, December 1, 2009

*** Dubai Debacle ****

Rating: 3.2
The dentist's voice echoed
from the valley of bicuspid.
Unseen, insignificant roots
that held ground so far,

Vanished in a gory grove.
Now cement shall stay
where senses once prevailed,
capped with a golden crown.

I remember those grains
of sand that shone in the vast
desert, till dunes gave way
to fancy foundations.

Helpless cactus plant, stares at its
reflection in the gleaming glass as
Woeful investors watch indices.
Valuations vanish in a gory grove.

Now senses shall spring where
cement once stayed. Back
home the juice corner introduced
a new flavor, sheikh shake.
Nikunj Sharma
Pradyumna Jyotir 29 January 2010
your satire is so does not make fun of makes one to pause and think.....the flavor is fresh like the Sheikh Shake.good work Nikunj...just keep writing.
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Janani Ashwin 29 December 2009
Your grace in presentation of a visit to the dentist and reflections with imaginative ease is conspicuous. Thanks. janani
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george george 20 December 2009
Subtle sarcasm works well here. Nicely thought out, flows smoothly. Well done!
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Samanyan Lakshminarayanan 14 December 2009
nation and the rulers everywhere cheat the common such levels...nothing can happen overnight
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Robbie Squires 14 December 2009
this was great, i absolutely loved the imagery and the fact that i could cleary picture a scene in my mind. awesome job :)
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Fay Slimm 13 December 2009
Well thought through and amusing too - - you have captured the feel of the event with gory reality - - - well done 10 Fay
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Hippie Girl 13 December 2009
Very descriptive. I liked it!
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Ravi Sathasivam 07 December 2009
Very creativity poem. Great imagination is mixed here. Well penned Enjoyed reading it Thanks for sharing with me
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Nikunj Sharma 07 December 2009
Comment from LADY GRACE: this piece is different from normal i will say, this is another good, what happened to the canine... premolars and the hemorrhage syndrome? ...well, i like this in the way it is represented, , , from sheik shake.....and from sands in the desert where cacti are goshhhhhhhhhhhhh...actually, so nice the presentation of course...aside from educational, it also introduces new terminologies for everyone..nice idea and nice i had promised, as the sun rises in east, i'll be in your page my its 6am here and the sun starts to shine in the mountains of the promise land, mindanao...smileeeeeeeeeeeeeee please put that in my commnts...i cant open ur commnt goshhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, , i dont know..i send it many times but it is not allowed, , , so i have no patient to goshhhhhhhh, i have to go so i'll leave these wrds for ur commnt.please do the favor to write this in your 'dubai debacle''..thanks for inviting...
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Kesav Easwaran 07 December 2009
allegorical write on the issue...imaginative piece...very well composed...10
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