For miles and miles of mindless devotion
I wander this earth with one single emotion
In search of the answer to appetite sweet
And to rest on the crest when my life is complete
But meaning like motion is much like the ocean
Flailing about for one fool's fleeting notion
Failing to fear all the things that I should
Searching for one thing I know to be good
Like a chump in the dump of depressing debris
I may slump from the bump when my bike hits a tree
And blame the first person I happen to see
Without seeing the problem is actually me
Through shades of the morning and blades full of dew
When sun rays on blue days make shadows of you
I ponder the meaning of minds in confusion
Who yonder lie reading my last elocution.
2 – i like the rhyming throughout, but some parts are not 'clear', and i don't think " elocution" is to be used as you used it. bri :)
1- i liked: " Like a chump in the dump of depressing debris I may slump from the bump when my bike hits a tree And blame the first person I happen to see Without seeing the problem is actually me Through shades of the morning and blades full of dew When sun rays on blue days make shadows of you" esp. the d/d/d alliteration.
Well said Bryan! Courage, who cannot use a double dose of that! Those last two lines, great ending or perhaps a new beginning.
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A well articulated piece of poetry nicely embellished with poetic rhyme and rhythm. An insightful creation.