Hasmukh Amathalal

Gold Star - 465,829 Points (17/05/1947 / Vadali, Dist: - sabarkantha, Gujarat, India)

Father Shouted - Poem by Hasmukh Amathalal

"Go to hell, father shouted"
It was addressed to me no doubt
How was I to take his outburst?
Sometimes, I felt. It was needed or must

We receive disrespectful words from elders
But they are all our well wishers
Even if something is said directly
They are not to be taken disrespectfully

In family sometimes youngsters get no notice
This is general feeling and practice
It doesn't mean they are neglected
They are looked after well and certainly acted

But as age advances, you got to forget
Life is meant for kids and their growth to let
If they want to behave in different manner
We need to give room and garner

No doubts elder behave irresponsibly
But need to remind them to act sensibly
Not to come out with extreme measure
This certainly does not help or assure

We must watch them to grow in healthy atmosphere
They should look towards us in dignified manner
It becomes then balanced approach to tackle
Where elders rush to the rescue in case of any troubles

Comments about Father Shouted by Hasmukh Amathalal

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (9/3/2012 6:32:00 PM)

    Jon ThElitepoet Crenshaw likes this.

    Jon ThElitepoet Crenshaw I enjoyed your piece Hasmukh...great advice for the young...well done sir.
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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/31/2012 7:46:00 PM)

    A Nice Breath! Wilyne Belizaire9 hours ago Weird summary, I know, but I really felt like it was a nice breath to me, because this is an issue that I've been dealing with for a long time from my parents and it's nice to see the positive side to it! Enjoyed it! Keep writing! ! ! : -) (Report) Reply

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/31/2012 7:46:00 PM)

    Oliver Sherman10 hours ago Great Sentiment, the grammatical errors interrupted the proper delivery of your theme. You have definite talent just tighten it up a bit. (Report) Reply

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/31/2012 7:45:00 PM)

    CALVIN9 hours ago This poem is fine Comment +1 Great Sentiment (Report) Reply

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/31/2012 7:45:00 PM)

    Damira Jukic9 hours ago good Comment +1 it's okay (Report) Reply

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/31/2012 7:45:00 PM)

    Angelo9 hours ago Love it Comment +1.. (Report) Reply

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/31/2012 7:44:00 PM)

    A lot of good advice here and should be well taken. Only I just wonder whether the youth of today will accept this piece of advice graciously. Written with experience and style. (Report) Reply

  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (8/31/2012 9:42:00 AM)

    “Go to hell, father shouted”
    It was addressed to me no doubt
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Poem Submitted: Friday, August 31, 2012

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