Forgotten Poem by Jennifer Rose

Forgotten



Crying out in fear,
When no one can hear,
My final breaths
Will be my death.
The silver blade,
Makes a final cascade,
Over my blood soaked skin,
My wrists grow thin.
Did no one want me?
Did no one see?
I wanted you only to say
“I love you” one last day.
Now there is no time,
In my growing crime.

Monday, November 16, 2009
Topic(s) of this poem: silver
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Alex Gomez 20 December 2010

Admittedly depressing, but you show that you know a bit about poetic structure and some higher level wording. I'd recommend watching out for the syllable count of each line you put down. Syllables hold the flow of a rhyme scheme together. Otherwise, bravo.

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Aly Reiss 16 November 2009

I love this writing! It speaks to me because I really understand where you're coming from. Good poem!

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