I had always wondered if bliss lay somewhere beyond,
For I'm desperate to form with it an everlasting bond.
Is it in being pleasureless or in being pandered?
So this was the question before an answer thundered!
Now I see the welkin and earth as canvas vast.
Before I change it, bid its visage a farewell, fast!
Armed with jocund colours, I shall make sun blue:
Be armed to see this world made anew!
If death be cause of sorrow, let I vanquish it
And arrange for all the perpetual populace to fit!
So shall I burn material wealth, the mother of all spite,
And institute within all hearts, a love-born might.
The water shall now flow upward, so shall health:
People will now treasure above all, this wealth.
If time impedes me, bombarded with regrets shall it be;
For I shall try attain all the ostensible bliss I see.
Yet by doing all this, if bliss still remains unreached,
Then the only solution is its meaning to be breached.
In this world where nothing is defined and concrete,
Let I be the one who shall make victory out of defeat!
When I see below a series of Comments by our poet friend, Bri Edwards, I miss him and wonder where he is hiding.....! Nothing is heard of him....in recent days.
Here I see a seeker of bliss who tries first to understand what bliss really is! He comes to the conclusion that neither material wealth nor longevity of life guarantees bliss. The word 'bliss' is an ambiguous term. In the end he realizes that it is elusive. So the only way of achieving it is by turning every defeat into victory, if it is possible. Here I find the maturity of thought and style that far exceeds that of a teenager.
4 - My earlier reference to " Is it in being pleasureless or in being pandered? " was because i wondered who might find " bliss" by being " pleasureless" . I suppose some might, but NOT ME. Besides, as i've mentioned another time, " bliss" is just TOO MUCH HAPPINESS for people to desire/deserve. Bri :)
3 – AND MORE... THE idea of having " Fun" with the world [perhaps 'playing God'] appeals to me. Maybe people would start bowing down to me; so far all have refused to do THAT!
2 – " Let I be the one who shall make victory out of defeat! " i'd use " me" , not " I" . The idea of turning 'defeat' to 'victory', or some similar idea is not new, and i like the concept. I'll not read the Poet's Notes at this time. bri :)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
1 - Pleasureless and pandered seem to be extreme opposites! ! ! " wealth" =? " nothing is defined and concrete, " ...some things in MY world ARE defined and/or " concrete" , concrete for example!