Gazing Suicides Poem by Amy Louise Kerswell

Gazing Suicides

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I thought of dying today
Gazing down to the train track below
So shiny and black.

I heard the tracks calling me to join them below.
I heard them say if you want to jump
Then jump go on just jump.

I though I'd chuck myself away
Thought I'd fall below
To the train tracks underneath.

I thought it through and through.
With nothing else left to do
I let the train tracks call me below.

I ve sufferd enough in this evil world
Theres to much evil that lurks.
The world is a sain place for some.
It wasnt for me
I lived a life full of pain.

Things got to much
So I listened to the tracks below me
I knew it made sense for me.

I took the plunge
And I jumped down to the tracks below me
As I fall
I will die below

Things are meant for some
And this was meant for me
The train tracks told me so

Amy Kerswell

Thursday, June 14, 2007
Topic(s) of this poem: evil,today
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Walt Martin 14 June 2007

No technical critique indicated; I wouldn't, even if I had that degree of expertise , but ... OUCH! I Felt That! ! ! Anyone gifted enough to provoke such a response via the conveyance of emotion, be it bleak, beautiful, or some admixture of both, gets a high mark for ability from this commentator ... Raw as a fourth grade knee slide during a hot June recess ... Painful as any aged sensation can be before the tears initiate the soothing process . Yes, I did feel that. Call it being effective in the art form; Perhaps that's what it's all about. With thanks , walt .

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