Gone Poem by Theodora (Theo) Onken
Gone
September has nearly come and gone
.....Leaving me with only remnants;
.......Remnants of your summer scent-
Of your summering body golden;
.....Of the white sand between your toes-
Of your sand castles artistically built;
.....Of your promises to love me always-
Of our finger traced heart in the sand
.....with our initials and the words
........................Love forever;
So easily taken as the tide rushes in &
Eventually returning to the sea once more
.....Wiping away forever and leaving a
................Barren slate once again-
.....With nary a remnant of us
..................Left upon the shore.
By, Theodora Onken
September 17,2016
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This one is in my manuscript of my book i am putting together.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/15/2024 11:43:23 PM # 1.0.0.1119
Oh. My. Word. This is such a heartfelt poem- -heartfelt by you and heartfelt by your readers. You used this turning month of September to good purpose here- - September has nearly come and gone .....Leaving me with only remnants; .......Remnants of your summer scent - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -Now that is written so wonderfully that it sounds melodious, as if it could be the lyrics of a magnificent song like Autumn Leaves. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - And you are very very clever to repeat that word remnant in your closing line, it rounds this poem off perfectly.- - .....With nary a remnant of us ..................Left upon the shore. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - a ten and a spot on my list of favorite poems! ! ! ! !
Thank you Susan for taking the time to read and comment on my poetry. You are a wonderful friend and poet and i appreciate you so very much.
Susan, You are so good to me! ! You always manage to raise my self esteem and my opinion of some of my own work; Thank you again for your wonderful words of praise.