Adeline Foster

Gold Star - 9,222 Points (Instructor of poetry, Hagerstown, MD)

.haiku By Adeline - Poem by Adeline Foster

October's fingers
Slip the golden gowns of trees
To woodland carpet

Life slips gently
Across the silken day
I'm not ready

A curtain of rain
Relentless, daring spume feeds
Into my progress

Miles of black-top loom
Shadows block the burning sun
Semi-trucks rally

Topic(s) of this poem: autumn, humor, travel

Comments about .haiku By Adeline by Adeline Foster

  • Diane Hine (7/26/2014 2:00:00 AM)

    I love haikus but they're not easy. The first one is one of the best I've ever read. (Report) Reply

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  • Sana Ghostana (6/28/2014 8:09:00 PM)

    Nice haikus, Adeline. Very nice wording! (Report) Reply

  • Lee Mack (12/27/2013 8:32:00 PM)

    great work; I will get time for reading all your attractive poetry
    adding you to my list as friend to remember to read
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  • Patricia Grantham (12/17/2013 12:56:00 PM)

    Trees shedding their leaves and leaving a carpet under the trees.
    Very soothing and mellowed write. Rain falling and sometimes the sun
    takes a peek. Loved this.
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  • Bri Edwards (7/12/2013 3:32:00 PM)

    the first one i love, the second one i don't understand (what does into my progress mean? ?) , and the third one i don't care for but at least i might understand what you mean (is a car driving down a highway, passing lots of big trucks which shade the car with each passing?) . thanks for sharing. the first one made up for the others. (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins (5/24/2013 4:08:00 PM)

    A nice series of haikus Adeline. Each one carries a message (Report) Reply

  • (8/31/2012 6:57:00 PM)

    October’s fingers... This one caught my eye the most... you've managed to blend a perfect metaphor into such a few lines... outstanding Haiku (Report) Reply

  • (8/16/2012 5:11:00 PM)

    Nice set of Haikus... Terry (Report) Reply

  • (4/3/2012 1:10:00 PM) Haiku tenner ~ niv

    PS Please comment on Bliss regards ~ niv
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  • Igor Balatsky (2/9/2012 2:22:00 PM)

    Haiku-do of yours is so masterly: vivid, alive, metaphorical. I enjoy it – and follow your 'do'.) (Report) Reply

  • (8/6/2011 4:18:00 PM)

    Fall changes entire landscapes.
    Rain’s a part of life that we must deal with.
    And “let the truckers have their day.”
    I enjoyed your haiku very much. Good job.
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  • (8/10/2009 8:56:00 AM)

    These pieces are both simply stunning Adeline and so skilfully written. I am in awe! 10 Karin Anderson (Report) Reply

  • (12/23/2008 3:55:00 PM)

    Beautiful Haiku! I wish I could take your classes. Thanks. (Report) Reply

  • (8/20/2008 8:08:00 PM)

    Wonderful October. Tim (Report) Reply

  • (6/22/2008 4:05:00 AM)

    Seductive and skillful... (Report) Reply

  • (6/20/2008 5:13:00 PM)

    evokes the fleeting beauty of nature responded with distinctive sensitivity of a poet... lovely (Report) Reply

  • (6/17/2008 11:27:00 AM)

    I hear echoe there
    Can it be in japanese?
    It is hard to write
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  • Ric S. Bastasa (12/16/2007 3:27:00 PM)

    and when the carpet is laid

    and let the show begin.
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Poem Submitted: Sunday, December 16, 2007

Poem Edited: Thursday, December 17, 2015