Brandi Guthrie

Rookie (3-9-76 / California)

He Said 'Hi' - Poem by Brandi Guthrie

He said “Hi” today.
Oh God, what did I say?
“Good morning” or something,
It was total instinct.
If my heart did stop, my lungs didn`t help.
At an instant I froze inside myself.
I wonder if he knows how beautiful he is.
That nature, herself shyes green away envious.
And a light called “hope” shines from his eyes.
Now my heart hurts but I`m not going to cry…
He said “Hi”.
I wish I knew what he was thinking.
As he turned his head to look at me.
Maybe the pain from his thought`s reality
Would crash down on me like gravity.
It`s all a trick fate loves to play.
To twist this damage within me like clay.
See, I know I`ll never be good enough
To deserve the encompassing warmth of his love.
So I`m standing here, still in time
Wishing I`d never seen his eyes.
He said “Hi”.

Comments about He Said 'Hi' by Brandi Guthrie

  • Matt Mooney (5/13/2010 12:57:00 PM)

    Now that's what I call a brilliant poem.Would that your dream would come true. Any sequel to that encounter? It's such an honest and simple declaration of being attracted to someone and getting even a morsel of recognition in return! (Report) Reply

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  • (5/8/2010 7:44:00 AM)

    I love this ditty! It captures the moment so well... even with blushed cheeks, and coy and wistful insight. We all have moments like this, where we think wow and get caught off guard even with the simplest of smiles. Don't you worry I am sure he thinks you're lovely too!

    A moment of your life you have snapshotted and placed upon the sceen, you are an emotional writer and can transgress the feeling to others with your poetic talent. Very good indeed.

    Dale :)
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  • (5/7/2010 10:38:00 AM)

    I like the captured feel of nervous anticipation, and the silly hope and expectation that place on a meeting with that person we admire. We can't help it, it just consumes us. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, May 3, 2010

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