Naseer Ahmed Nasir

Line Of Control

They come to see us
In the company of winds and rains
Their whispers are heard
Besides the doors
And empty corridors are filled
With the shimmering garments and scented bodies.
Leaping over the walls, slipping down the roofs and sun shades
Walking with voiceless steps like the shadows of clouds
Eyes see them crossing the silence
Of half paved courtyards
Far from reach
Moving towards measureless distances.


The windows yawn with mouth agape
And ponder on that;
Overthrowing the earth, nestled comfortably on its breast
Looking triumphantly towards the sky
These mountains, beyond them
There must be a lake
And birds and nimbus clouds
And thickets of trees running into each other
Uneven grassy plains
Herds of sheep and lonely shepherds
And pathways running far away
There must be some village, some city
Or some other country
Where some other poet (like myself) lives
Writing verses!

Demarcation is easy on parchments
A few dots and lines delimitate
Mountains, rills, streams, sloping grounds
Fields, settlements, jurisdictions, ownerships and regions
Passes and secret paths
Even forts and battlements with rows of iron - clad heads
Can be drawn.
But while pointing out the shadows overstepping the walls
Extending to doors, windows, courtyards
And the silence spread up to the remote recesses of the hearts,
The sun and rain change their hue
On the ground plan.

(Translated from Urdu into English by Prof. Ghulam Jilani Asghar)

Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 5, 2008
Poem Edited: Saturday, May 21, 2011

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  • Deepta Protik Osman (1/2/2010 1:52:00 AM)

    One of the great poems

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  • Naseer Ahmed NasirNaseer Ahmed Nasir (12/7/2009 9:26:00 AM)

    Message from Surendra Kushwaha:

    From: Surendra Kushwaha (Vidisha India; Male; 48)
    To: Naseer Ahmed Nasir
    Date Time: 12/7/2009 8: 41: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: congrats

    dear naseer,
    The poem 'Line of Control' is captivating and gives message of harmony.
    Lots of love from across the border {your Indian brother}
    yours
    Surendra
    48
    India

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  • Catrina Heart (9/16/2009 5:52:00 PM)

    The line of control is the line of power.........great imagery and philosophy....10+++

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  • ZEYNEB SELEME (9/13/2009 12:42:00 PM)

    I liked this poem too...you must always write...

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  • Rayan AliRayan Ali (9/9/2009 2:27:00 PM)

    a very impressive poem...good to read.

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  • Subham Dutta (9/6/2009 3:03:00 AM)

    It is a really good poem

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  • Asma Khan (9/3/2009 10:08:00 PM)

    They come to see us
    In the company of winds and rains

    Superb words and nice flow.

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  • Mary Sanchez (9/2/2009 10:22:00 AM)

    Wow! At first this write seemed kind of hair-rising and mysterious. Yet I could not stop reading because it was also very exciting,
    As I continued on it came to be more comforting and rather jubilant.
    I really enjoyed this lovely piece of work.
    Thank you
    Sasa

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  • Sadiqullah KhanSadiqullah Khan (9/2/2009 4:23:00 AM)

    This is a forceful piece of writing, which would make you ponder in the beginning, creating curiosity of what the poet is speaking in the emptiness of the courtyards and windows agape. Crossing over shadows and the imagination across the line of control of the people similar like us. The echo is well depicted in the cold, mountains.10++

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  • Teigan Klippel (9/2/2009 1:02:00 AM)

    Loved every word of it.
    The thing about poetry is that it lets the reader into a fantasy world..
    and i love that feeling.

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  • Pandian Angelina (8/27/2009 3:35:00 PM)

    They form lines everywhere
    Indoctrinating discipline
    But, are butterflies indisciplined
    We seem far worse than animals
    Guarding territories traditions
    Superstitions and prejudices
    All made by selfish men
    Who step out of the self same lines
    To lead to gain to rule and grab
    Like sheep in pen we also live
    Within the lines and follow blindly
    Though it might lead to a butcher's stall
    Only poets prophets and seers
    Think of a world with no lines
    Other than the skyline at the horizon!
    Another poem to treasure from the secret trove of yours, sweet lulling words but hard hitting truth we find hidden within! Wonderful poem, friend, as always I humbly bow before the majesty of your words! Angel

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  • Marieta MaglasMarieta Maglas (8/26/2009 10:18:00 AM)

    beautiful flowing words, vivid images, well embedded philosophical concept........10

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  • Dr. Sonal Chhaya (8/25/2009 7:53:00 AM)

    Thank you for sharing this poem with me.
    It stirred strange and mixed feelings regarding borders. I personally do not believe in any form of demarcation. In the eyes of Nature we are all one.
    Nice write......

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  • Sandra Fowler (8/25/2009 3:16:00 AM)

    There will always be a place reserved for your verses,
    my dear Naseer. Your work reaches beyond the
    margins of all countries, cultures and creeds.
    Beautiful in any language.10/10.

    Always your friend,

    Sandra

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  • Santhi Krishnan (8/25/2009 2:50:00 AM)

    a very good piece of writing..which will cross the borders and reach every heart

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  • Krishnarasa Seshadri (8/22/2009 11:25:00 AM)

    Thankyou for inviting me to read this poem! ! Its beautifully written and translated! !

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  • Reshma Ramesh (8/15/2009 7:13:00 AM)

    beautiful write sir..........very well done

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  • Alison Cassidy (8/13/2009 8:07:00 PM)

    The indigenous people of Australia call them 'songlines' - they are expressed in story telling and dance rituals which define and 'map' the 'dreamtime' or history. This poem is beautifully written with some elegant expressions that linger in the mind's eye. I particularly enjoyed: 'Walking with voiceless steps like the shadows of clouds'. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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  • Naseer Ahmed NasirNaseer Ahmed Nasir (8/13/2009 1:31:00 PM)

    Message from Sebsibe Bade:

    From: Sebsibe Bade (Ethiopia ;)
    To: Naseer Ahmed Nasir
    Date Time: 8/13/2009 1: 18: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: NIce reflection

    Dear Nasser,
    Thank you very much for sharing us this beautiful and thoughtful poem! 'Line of Control' The choice of words, the imagery, and the philosophy embedded in the poem are key to the quality of the poem. As to the boundaries, you are right that they are artificial.But for me the lines are not drawn on paper, but in our minds. The problem lies in our mind set.And that makes it the more so difficult to break the barrier between us. Keep writing and sharing your best. And I invite you to comment on my poems.
    Sebsibe Bade

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  • Naseer Ahmed NasirNaseer Ahmed Nasir (8/13/2009 12:48:00 AM)

    Message from Asa Smith:

    From: Asa Smith (Brantford Canada; Male; 27)
    To: Naseer Ahmed Nasir
    Date Time: 8/12/2009 4: 01: 00 PM (GMT -6: 00)

    Subject: '' Line Of Control ''

    I often wonder about things such as these. Strange that some invisible line somehow seperates people and countries. We seem to be so different, but in most aspects we are exactly the same. I often think that in just a few miles I could be standing in the USA, I'm from Canada. And if I was in the USA, just a few miles I could be in Mexico, and so on and so forth. How does a border, a line on a map seperate us so? In just a few steps, we could be that much closer. In peace and harmony with the rest of the world. We are human, we are the same. In this world together, why can't people see, how truely connected we are? I liked your poem, makes people think.

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