Longing (Haiku) Poem by Elizabeth Padillo Olesen

Longing (Haiku)

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The distant echo
from the mountains high resounds!
Come and bless our land!

Saturday, August 29, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: haiku,longing
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Fabrizio Frosini 29 August 2015

a good one, Elizabeth, but in classic haiku there are not exclamation marks.. try a '-' as a kireji, at the end of the 2nd line.. The distant echo from the mountains high resounds - Come and bless our land Cheers Fabrizio

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Bhargabi Dei Mahakul 29 August 2015

Come and bless our land. So pleasing sound to reduce the distance between mountains and echo. Wonderful drafting....10

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