Putholi Arumugham T

Love At First Sight

I was with my friends on a evening cool,
looking at the girls on their way from school.
It was the job that most boys get engaged in
as they get ready for their adolescent age sin.
Lot of girls like flock of clouds passed by,
But all I felt was just a sad sigh.
Most of them were beautiful and good looking,
But none of them made my heart go kicking.
I was about to leave that place bored,
mockery from my friends was all I heard.
'Dude you wont find here one of your angels
like those coming in stupid fairy tales'
'He is looking for what a Bora, Sara or Dora? ' another said.
'That barbie looking heroine in David Copperfield'



Suddenly I heard a bicycle bell
and all their scoffings came to a stand still.
Vexedly and leisurely did I turn around,
immediately I felt my feet off the ground.
An angel clad in half saree, gentle green -
If that beautiful, a girl had ever been?
Her eyes were lovely, dark and deep
my heart was jumping, bounds and leap.
Her hair was tidy, combed in plait,
on either side of her shoulders bright.
Her nose was perfect, sharp and cute,
my heart then just skipped a beat.
Her body slim, delicate and doll-like
Her lips seemed like a cherry over a fresh-cream cake.



She rang once again her bicycle bell
taking away from me forcefully that
heavenly moment, leaving me startled.
She smiled gently like a breeze - making oxygen
escape my lungs, with a deep breathe.
'Excuse me' was all with a soft voice she said,
I moved away from her path like almost half dead.
Oh in that mo, I fell in love.
fatally struck by an arrow from cupids bow.
It was a love at first sight,
From then my life had never been right.

Poem Submitted: Sunday, May 24, 2009
Poem Edited: Monday, May 25, 2009

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Comments about Love At First Sight by Putholi Arumugham T

  • Alexia Miles (3/6/2010 2:50:00 PM)

    I do like this one a lot. thats because I am a born romantic.
    your writings are very good and clear.
    well done Alexia.

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  • Kristina B; Williams (8/8/2009 1:21:00 PM)

    now heres a poem/tale of true high school romance.not like the movies where the cool kid always gets the cheerleader, or a dorky kid gets remade and still gets the girl of his dreams, this is a true write of how pubity really is, the guys and girls pushing you to be with some1 cause of how they look or bcuz they are in the cool crowd, but even if they are cute or handsome they dont attract you mentally, cuz pyhsical apearence fades then what are you left with..it is almost like my poem 'the best 50 bucks, i ever won'..read it sometime

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  • Saeid Hadavand (6/23/2009 9:01:00 AM)

    This is the most romantic poem... I've ever... Very nice

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  • Indira RenganathanIndira Renganathan (6/3/2009 8:52:00 AM)

    Excellent flow of words with good rhyming...a common incident in life is greatly portrayed...well done

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  • Rosalita Fernandez (5/31/2009 5:07:00 PM)

    beautofully written, well done

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  • Jim Valero (5/30/2009 10:50:00 AM)

    Just one thing, perhaps: either write the complete word 'more' (line 4 from the end up) , or include an apostrophe if you want to indicate dialect, 'mo'.'

    The last line, 'from then my life had never been right, ' seems ungrammatical, not clear as to meaning. Do you mean, 'from then on my life changed'? or 'I realized I had not really lived before'?

    The line would benefit from re-phrasing.

    Thanks again!

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  • Jim Valero (5/30/2009 10:44:00 AM)

    The poem moves swift in simple, though appropriate, rhythms that give the poem its charming tone of youthful excitement, young life. The story may be common, but the telling is insightful-no matter how others may jeer and taunt, the young boy's world is a thousandfold more special, magical, and exciting than the world of his detractors.

    The rhymes also contribute to this informal, ironic, tone which is the perfect one for the young boy's final epiphany!

    Thanks for sharing.

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  • Cryselle D'souza (5/28/2009 2:49:00 AM)

    i really felt u expressed ur feelings quiet well

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  • The Dreamer (5/26/2009 5:20:00 PM)

    She smiled gently like a breeze - making oxygen
    escape my lungs, with a deep breathe.
    'Excuse me' was all with a soft voice she said,
    I moved away from her path like almost half dead.

    Very good could feel the moment and sent me back nany years to my youth - thank you

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  • Brandon w (5/25/2009 12:03:00 PM)

    Its a good poem in many ways.I enjoyed reading.keep up the good writing.

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  • Joya Feghaly (5/25/2009 10:41:00 AM)

    pretty interesting to read...
    it's actually brilliant... (^-^)

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  • Nathan Gibbons (5/25/2009 10:28:00 AM)

    very effective poem in telling of the sudden birth of love...

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  • Natalie Bebbington (5/25/2009 1:52:00 AM)

    this poem is brilliant

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  • Omar Ibrahim (5/25/2009 1:19:00 AM)

    very good.......i liked your rhyming......lovely to read!

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  • Vijay Menon (5/25/2009 12:53:00 AM)

    fantastic write 10+ nice

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  • T S (5/24/2009 12:22:00 PM)

    Brilliant write
    Like it very much
    10 ++++

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  • ~EmmaLeigh~ Smith (5/24/2009 12:08:00 PM)

    very imaginative. lovely write.

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  • Saadat TahirSaadat Tahir (5/24/2009 12:06:00 PM)

    vivid...strong...emotive and fantastic imagery
    a nice write

    love at first sight...must read!
    mid section best...as usual....of the poem
    ; -)

    more in a msg
    cheers

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  • ~Heart of Ice~ ¢♦ ¢♦ ¢ (5/24/2009 11:18:00 AM)

    it's really good, it could be a little bit better. but not by much, keep writin'

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  • Nimal Dunuhinga (5/24/2009 10:51:00 AM)

    At first sight it's really hard to analyze love as it has many complications, anyway you handled it smoothly!

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