My Sand Castle Poem by nimal dunuhinga

My Sand Castle

Rating: 5.0


I opened the creaky door and little windows.
Let wind comes to sooth me.
Nobody wants to stay for a while
And my burning altar cries.
I am scared to remain that opened.
The culprits may invade as saints in the middle of the night.
But in this empty house what they have to take away?
I have pawned everything that would never redeem.
The boisterous waves rolled up to the shore
And I slipped.
The string was broken and the kite flew towards the heaven.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sandra Fowler 11 April 2007

Excellent imagery.The metaphor of the kite with broken strings is especially effective. Very poignant. Wishing you a better tomorrow. Warm regards, Sandra

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kalubovila East, Sri Lanka
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