No More Open Doors Poem by LaRon Green Sr.

No More Open Doors

Rating: 5.0

Black as can be
you staring at me
it wasn't meant
to be
you cheating on me
how sad can that be
me laying around
for thee
you disguising bee
I should have
left you
before (3) three o'clock
at the sound of
the beep
you two timing tree
the door has closed
you are out the door
I don't want you
no more
it's no more
open doors
for sure

Ana Zaldivar 01 April 2009

seems you wrote this with a lot of pain and anger.. like it; D

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Nimal Dunuhinga 04 April 2009

Very painful, if it's locked then somebody must inside or taken the key away after locking?

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Mohammed Albalushi 05 April 2009

sad but yes no more open doors, well write dear

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Naidz Ladia 05 April 2009

owwwws, what a sad ending...

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Winnie Angel 05 April 2009

..sad though true..but u did the right thing by ending the useless bee from collecting more honey.....Winnie

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Heyyou Boy 19 January 2012

Do i feel that way to many times. Great write.

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a touching poem..loved that way of writing..that feeling of no more..after her there will be a closed door...enjoyed the reading..10++++

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very sad ending but it's better to close the door for that disguising bee... well written and thanks for sharing. best regards, jdh811

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Marilyn Lott 09 April 2009

Well, you sure told her, in no uncertain terms. Good one. '10! ' Best Wishes, Marilyn

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I dont know why but this poem made me laugh..probably cause you werent afraid to use those metaphors...Great write....I give it a ten! ! <33Payyton

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