Promise To Be With You (Sonnet) Poem by Tirupathi Chandrupatla
Promise To Be With You (Sonnet)
My love for you is quite deep in my heart
Do not compare me with someone else
Precise I am like a well thrown dart
Please come closer and measure my pulse
What can I achieve without your support?
I know not where the destiny is bound
I need you by my side, be my escort
Greater'll be our reach far and beyond
All of a sudden you give me your consent
Speechless I am with happiness inside
Precious're these moments you're God sent
You are divine angel, you are my pride.
Can't express in words how blessed I feel
Promise to be with you in all things with zeal.
I have not tried my hand on sonnet yet but like what you have written. Beautiful in thought and content.
In my opinion pulse may be replaced by heart and in next line soul. A soulful write.
Your attempt is appreciable. However, I hold my opinion that sonnets have to be poetic all along and Chandrupatlaji, in that angle there is further scope for your improvement. After all the content is everything and there you are sir..
This is a beautiful sonnet.... deep in content and almost perfect in form! I give you a 10! Usually each line in a sonnet should have ten syllables.... Your first line has only 9 syllables! 'My love for you is quite deep in my heart'(by adding 'quite' it becomes 10 in number) Just my suggestion, since you asked!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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I like your free verses. You are a wonderful modern poet.