Short
drifting
purposeless
daring nothing lines
nothing to rhyme or metre.
Just our lives
inexplicable presence –
a sort of consonance
on the sibilant.
A profound bouquet of well-chosen words and placement. Also, I like the header in your profile about being civil and honest.
Although I am not a fan of free form the very formlessness enhances your meassage
A fine example of 'less is more'. Your most important line is 'just our lives - explicable presence'. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
With this succinct piece you have hit so many things at the same time…like a modern poem it generates many meanings…the modern poems have no rhythm, no pattern in rhyme or meter and in reality our life too resembles today works of art, a reflection of the contemporary…an intelligent poem, liked it…. **Abha**
very powerful dude....in such a short amount of writing too....i think you may have just captured the meaning of life.10/10
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
touching poem, so poignant :)