She's so lazy
could be dead
pushing up Daisy
from her bed
she's so sleepy
cannot wake
pushing up Daisy
gave her a shake
out for the count
she's totally gone
pushing up Daisy
is this a con
find bottle empty
with note morose
pushing up Daisy
she's comatose
she's got no pulse
could be deceased
pushing up Daisy
is seeking release
she's flat out
check if she breathes
pushing up Daisy
I'll order the wreaths
5 stars. To your readers: PUSHING UP DAISYS (the flowers) can mean: ' (adjective) DEAD', BUT I've never thought of it as an adjective, always thinking it an idiom. bri : )
Your style of capitalizing and using invisible punctuation marks 'work' in THIS poem, but, for me, would not 'work' in all I think.
It's a catchy story & entertaining. I like rhyming.& yous ARE GOOD. Your style of capitalizing
Excellently crafted…The progression from the use of the inanimate word "lazy" to "I'll order the wreaths" is fantastic.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Finally getting something done in her flat-lined state. What a mischievous imagination.