Rabbits Poem by Tan Pratonix

Rabbits

Rating: 5.0


At the mouth of the river where tall grasses grow,
Where no hunter hunts with hounds nor bugles blow,
Where the carefreeness of life lets rabbits roll -
My thoughts go scampering softly down a rabbit hole.

And there they crouch where one with silver knife
Prods them into submissive shape and waits
To cut the gay blue carefreeness of life
Into a vicious haze of pain and hate.

Then with smiling red eyes and silver teeth they go,
My thoughts, to where the tall green grasses grow;
And hurling forward with a savage scream
They shock the rabbits from their rolling dream.

A flurry of frightened faces in the river:
My thoughts are mad with red and silver teeth,
And mad as frightened faces shiver
And swirl toward their sudden death.

Thursday, February 2, 2006
Topic(s) of this poem: red,river,silver
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Gina Onyemaechi 02 February 2006

Rich description, distressing violence. Strong stuff. Kind regards, Gina.

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Fred Rik Kesner 18 April 2006

There is such depth in your writing.

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Simone Inez Harriman 16 February 2006

Awesome Tan (10 from me)

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Emma Johnson 13 February 2006

The way you make your frantic and red-eyed thoughts mirror and echo the eventual horror of rabbits when they are caught in a 'haze of pain and hate' is absolutely brilliant and original.

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Bridgid Patrick 09 February 2006

This is very powerful work..sincerely. bridgid x

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Lawrence S. Pertillar 02 February 2006

I like this! It makes a statement that we all are victims of those we seek us out in the comforts of our 'nests' for sport and selfishness. L

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