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Remembrance Of Things Past

Rating: 4.5

At every sunset
when cars in the metropolis
run -

wheeled beetles
fast crawling
on the streets,

yes, I look deeper
into the gloom

of my heart,
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Thursday, February 16, 2006
Topic(s) of this poem: memories
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Nibedita Deb 19 February 2006

I appreciate the theme and also the way you have put it. I agree with Ma'am Gina, 'wheeled beetles fast crawling on the street' - this was a specially strong image. But then I can't help disapproving the extra-ordinary fast pace of this poem. Could have gone a little more with one's breath...leaves one panting! Still a nice work. Thank you. N.D.

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Gina Onyemaechi 16 February 2006

A well-drawn picture of a person's recollections amidst a busy, racing world. The 'wheeled beetles' thing is sharp. I offer you 9 marks for this strong piece of writing, Sofiul. With warmth, Gina.

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