Ride The Chariot Comments
Prurient angels possess the body,
Mysticism is the realm of the soul;
Sensuous mind tip taps the body,
The bliss lies deep down the soul.
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A deep poem that makes my mysterious body wander in the secret profundities of my soul.10.
a wonderful approach... wish we cud ride this chariot n harness all the horses well... tomake r life worthwhile..
DEAR MR SHARMA, Thanks for a poem with philosophical attitude with perfect rhyming brilliantly worded, Ilike the last two lines more since it is conveying the main message. 'Ride over the chariot, command the horses Dive deep within to strengthen noble forces' Should it not be the motto of our life right from the beginning.? A small suggestion to ponder over the end rhymes with the same words in 1st& 3rd(body) and 2nd& 4th(soul) which will make it sound better. A-10- from me for this poem.thanks for sharing.--Rajkumar
a brilliantly written poem to command those horses of Anger, avarice, pride, etc. anjali
that's a well written and lovely piece, evocative and so suggestive, O really loved the flow of your words and ideas, so brilliant, this is what I call poetry, and you are my friend a real poem
Yes, deep and profound but there is room to fine tune which I think is needed in a poem of this class. H
Very deep and profound, CP! You have a unique writing style. Best Wishes, Marilyn
Oh soul! You have come to rule neither to be ruled nor to be fooled Arise awake and take charge and tamed the horses for divine march. Good work. Last two lines are amazing
Very strong writing, C.P. Your third stanza is particularly compelling. Kind regards, Sandra
This is indeed a nice 'spritual' poem, and as mentioned, has been prompted by Lamont Palmer's poem 'Day of Relative Rest', but I wonder, if it was not prompted by 'The Gita'!
C.P. I enjoyed your poem greatly. Those last two lines are quite powerful, a reflection of man's resolve. I'll be reading more of you. Thanks for the mention, my friend. -LP
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12/19/2025 2:07:31 AM # 1.0.0
very meaningful the thoughts are so great...very interesting.. flowing with depth... 10+++