~ SCOOP AND SKIP WHY THEN? ~
Ms. Nivedita
UK.
May 31,2010
Scoop and skip why?
Liquid soul wantin’ lib
Cordonlessly unzip
Why not dip n’ sip?
Lick and lap
Splurge in swanky sap
I’m no booby trap
A scooty showbiz swap
Nuzzle and nipnap.
Play my in-built harp
In Yo-ho-ho Soprano G-Sharp
Hold your hottie honey zap
In melodymedley enwrap.
Galore gaga gala
Effuse wallow in hula-hula.
Scoop and skip why then?
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Zap ~ Something that imparts excitement or great interest.
Yo-ho-ho ~ Gain someone's attention
Hula-hula ~ Polynesian rain dance performed by a woman.
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rhythmic lines as if a childish composition in absence of melody. In the other hand attaching a melody to this could be used as a kindergarten dance song. In short hitting two birds with one stone. Is this a good idea?
how i wish i could hula hula to this inviting beat of child-like melody. it made me smile, then laughter and joy welled up in my spirit.
Really I am astonished! Whats an approach! Liquid soul..... the poet wants to share with the reader and with cordoneless liberty. I think it is not another spiritual song of the forgotten world. If not, my question is, are you a poet who carries the three dimensional subastance which is called a body! Perhaps you have body, who realises all such adjectives to put before soul. A new look undoubtedly. We the reader also bursting into passion to enjoy the mysterious and also mystic rain-dance with such ancient rhythm and instruments. Whats a dillema really! Dancing like a polynesian woman but that is liquid soul, how could it be possible...can't imagine! Whom would I see.....liquid soul or woman! Actually where the poet wants us to reach! Alignation but in such a way our imagination simply losing our vision in a horizon of white and ocean-like expansion which is called eternity and where differnt shapes of men and women are vanished. No lines or arrangement of festival are there. Rolling with waves after waves and white is everywhere. Really its a scoop but honestly we the reader do not want to skip. Used words like hula-hula, gala-giga, yo-ho-ho etc. are very much intoxicative and intoxicative is the right word to use. Your writings are perhaps lyrical-poem which should be tuned with vocal chord. But lastly the liquid-soul-container, ask you, have you any solid state of existence at all, just like a human! ? ! ENJOYED MUCH..... Regards, 10++++ pranab (Its me Pranab k chakraborty alias Apoet Bangla who send you second times.)
Sense and sensibility infused with a rhythmic essense all mingled into sing song poetry. Trully enjoyed and as search out my harp! ! love it. a+++++++
Play my in-built harp In Yo-ho-ho Soprano G-Sharp Hold your hottie honey zap In melodymedley enwrap. lovely write... meaningful...rich idea with well expression...loved it 10+++++++++
Read with interest comments of PO PO …actually poet has bared the ‘drones’ …how they exploit the feminine flesh and flee…the Poet very melodiously blended the octave to be in with and within the soul of beloved… 10++
It is poem with some message if delved deeply flip side subtly presented …poet wanted to point to poseurs to just want to harvest honey without giving in return…so the caption Scoop And Skip Why? It is mostly found that women are used as ‘flesh-commodity’ with full of guile …women here extend big hands to be in ‘Oneness’…but 'Genetically Dominant’ [xy] overrules the ‘Genetically Recessive’ [xx]…hey men…days are near when women will be at par nay top of men…just wait and see… Rich metaphor and presentation of lovely and loft emotions…enjoyed and thanks Ma’am 10+++ PO PO
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
a change of notes, , from lower do to higher...this is nicely done...applicable in a song and in a poem...