Rating: 4.3
it was right after your sister's fiancée
died. i drove to your house in
my dad's cadillac.
it was raining and by the time i got there,
i had the windshield wipers on full blast.

i parked up aways from your cul-de-sac in an
empty neighbor's drive.
my view was clear—i could see
straight into the window above your
washing machine

where you were standing
quietly folding laundry,
with that look on your face
that makes me break like

you stood there
staring out into the black wet
night—as if you too
were crying from every pore

and your eyes fell upon a silver car
parked up aways in a
neighbor's drive;
and i could've sworn i saw
recognition in your eyes.
Saturday, April 29, 2006
Cellar Door 29 October 2007
Wow! You truely have a gift. Excellent write.
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Ivan Donn Carswell 23 July 2007
Sea glass is used outside its conventional origin - thus adding a mysterious touch to this narrative. Rgds, Ivan
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David Gerardino 06 January 2007
with that look on your face that makes me break like sea-glass, this is a great line, , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,
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Lauren Michaels 06 June 2006
I can practically taste the salt in the rain and the tears. Beautiful Sus. Regards
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Chuck Audette 11 May 2006
My favorite by you so far. Wonderful piece. -chuck
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' if you too were crying from every pore' i LOVE the strength of this phrase. outstanding. Jake
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Seán O' Muiriosa 08 May 2006
This is a moving piece, this is real life, real people, real poetry. A very special poem. ou write with great reality. Well done. All the best, Seán
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Graham Leese 08 May 2006
I tell a lie, if anything this poem was the nearest to grabbing me in mood and tone, excellent choice of words
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Michael Petryszyn 06 May 2006
I agree with Tomas, every poem should end with some form of twist and you did that perfectly. Great poem, you should be proud.
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Kevin Deckert 06 May 2006
good poem, makes me a bit reflective, nothing to say about style, just great
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