s./j. goldner

Rookie (March 2nd,1984 / USA)

Sea-Glass - Poem by s./j. goldner

it was right after your sister's fiancée
died. i drove to your house in
my dad's cadillac.
it was raining and by the time i got there,
i had the windshield wipers on full blast.

i parked up aways from your cul-de-sac in an
empty neighbor's drive.
my view was clear—i could see
straight into the window above your
washing machine

where you were standing
quietly folding laundry,
with that look on your face
that makes me break like
sea-glass.

you stood there
shirtless,
staring out into the black wet
night—as if you too
were crying from every pore

and your eyes fell upon a silver car
parked up aways in a
neighbor's drive;
and i could've sworn i saw
recognition in your eyes.


Comments about Sea-Glass by s./j. goldner

  • (10/29/2007 8:37:00 PM)


    Wow! You truely have a gift. Excellent write. (Report) Reply

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  • (7/23/2007 5:41:00 PM)


    Sea glass is used outside its conventional origin - thus adding a mysterious touch to this narrative. Rgds, Ivan (Report) Reply

  • (1/6/2007 11:02:00 PM)


    with that look on your face
    that makes me break like
    sea-glass, this is a great line, , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , , ,
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  • (6/6/2006 4:01:00 PM)


    I can practically taste the salt in the rain and the tears. Beautiful Sus.
    Regards
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  • (5/11/2006 12:04:00 PM)


    My favorite by you so far. Wonderful piece. -chuck (Report) Reply

  • (5/11/2006 10:03:00 AM)


    '...as if you too were crying from every pore'

    i LOVE the strength of this phrase. outstanding.

    Jake
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  • (5/8/2006 4:30:00 PM)


    This is a moving piece, this is real life, real people, real poetry. A very special poem. ou write with great reality. Well done.
    All the best, Seán
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  • (5/8/2006 8:09:00 AM)


    I tell a lie, if anything this poem was the nearest to grabbing me in mood and tone, excellent choice of words (Report) Reply

  • (5/6/2006 9:16:00 AM)


    I agree with Tomas, every poem should end with some form of twist and you did that perfectly. Great poem, you should be proud. (Report) Reply

  • (5/6/2006 5:18:00 AM)


    good poem, makes me a bit reflective, nothing to say about style, just great (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, April 29, 2006

Poem Edited: Friday, August 4, 2006


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