Searching Poem by Della Perry

Searching

Rating: 3.5


Gazing below, the jade water is as clear as a pane of glass
Golden, shimmering sand spreads like butter across the land
Noisy, busy birds fly over above white clouds
Soaring high then low on the wind
A new story told in every grain of salty sand.

The calm, cobalt sky, a blanket above the caged world
White figures dancing across the blue, like a shroud
Birds free, alive on warm air
A most beautiful land of white and blue
Lifetime's hidden in every storm cloud.

The wonderful, rolling meadows crocheted across the land
To live outside in this beauty for always I would
Chattering, winged angels fly from branch to stem
Nature's Eden, wild garden
A dream with each creature of the wood.

To flit between each part of the world
Free from the cage
And seek myself from above
I know I would if I knew I could!

Monday, August 31, 2015
Topic(s) of this poem: nature
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 14 November 2015

Free Verse seems like a very appropriate name for the form you've chosen to call this. searching for the freedom of birds, though they too have to land sometime! or do some birds mate and lay eggs in the sky? ? yes, i can see it now: a nesting colony in the clouds. DROP the eggs on this cumulus and be on one's way. eggs hatch in the warmth of the sun [or warmth of rising greenhouse gases] and DROP the bugs or fish or seeds down to nourish them. [gee! who knew that nourish needs an o? ] The calm, cobalt sky, a blanket above the caged world............... like the alliteration(s) here. and i just noticed the rhyme scheme of the first three stanzas. i like that you didn't force yourself to add a fifth line to the last stanza. this is one choice i'll make for inclusion in Section B of my/our November a showcase for PH poets. catch ya later, alligator. bri :)

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