My heart has been shattered by my broken dreams.
My sadness has been to its extreme,
How can my beloved love shatter my own world?
What is this life?
What is this world?
I just see helplessness everywhere,
I just see the darkness through my eyes,
I just see the looted caravan of my heart,
The Palace of my dreams has been devastated,
I couldn't understand this tyrannous world,
I don't know where you are,
as i see you as part of my suffering!
I love this poem. When i read it i can really feel the suffering. Great job on conveying your feelings so well. I really liked it.
Yes, I can read you are really suffering...you've carried over the emotion very well, and what an ending!
Whilst i can see the pain, the poem is not an enjoyable read. It is full of 'I' and 'My' but says little to desribe what it was about the girl that made you love her. It is very 'woe is me'. To quote a well known saying 'Laugh and the whole world laughs with you, cry and you cry alone'
For God's sake, called she back and delivered this beautiful poem.Muito Lindo! ! ! ! !
Awesome job, very vivid images. The expression of anguish is compelling.
SINCERELY EMOTIONAL..... I guess all of us can relate to varying degrees with u on this, i like your control of words n emotions, again, very good....
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
very emotional and deep