pratik rajani

Bronze Star - 2,096 Points (6/3/1996 / Rajkot)

Sun And Planet - Poem by pratik rajani

You are the Sun,
And i am Planet.
From years to years,
I am roaming around
Round and round.

Sometimes i am close.
Sometimes far far away.

You are the reason.
Why i have seasons.
Sunny summer is my strength
And
Windy winter is my weakness.

You have given a day.
You have given a way.
You have hold me with endless force from countless time.
People call it gravity.
I call it love.

Yes, My love

You are the Sun,
And i am Planet.

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Form: Epic


Comments about Sun And Planet by pratik rajani

  • Gopika Radeesh (2/19/2018 6:28:00 AM)

    fab! ! ! Beautifully woven words! ! (Report)Reply

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  • Rini Shibu (2/18/2018 1:06:00 AM)

    It's a beautiful poem of love and attachment..nice to read for the second time..10
    Rini
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  • Chinedu Dike (1/30/2018 9:13:00 PM)

    Rich flow of thoughts in good rendition of words. Beautiful and very passionate love poem elegantly brought forth from the heart. Lovely work of art. Thanks for sharing Pratik. (Report)Reply

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  • Binayakumar Mohanty (10/24/2017 8:28:00 AM)

    You have given a day.You have given the way.Nice lines.Thanks for sharing.1o (Report)Reply

    Pratik Rajani(10/26/2017 10:19:00 AM)

    thanks for big 10

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  • Glen Kappy (10/24/2017 7:29:00 AM)

    pratik, in this piece as in your water poem, you show good poetic instincts. in both you use images that are familiar and, therefore, accessible. which reminds me of hafez the great sufi mystic, one of my favorite poets, whom i know only through the english renderings of daniel ladinsky. -glen (Report)Reply

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  • (10/5/2017 6:48:00 AM)

    If only we could love the planet which sustains us instead of destroying all that she has given.
    Just like the planets all life is interdependent, a fact we refuse to heed.
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  • Gn Rao (9/20/2017 7:42:00 PM)

    well written nice keep it up blessings and best wishes (Report)Reply

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  • Sy Wong (9/13/2017 9:48:00 PM)

    Dear Pratik, you suggested i read this poem n i did..i like this poem..given me a good start for the day.
    I am sure why didn't God who created everything place the Sun nearer to Earth..hah! we'l be burnt and everything.
    God is Great! I believe God.
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  • Doris Cornago (9/13/2017 7:21:00 PM)

    Yes. A humbling down of man. He cannot get away from God who is love. Or it could be a woman. Whatever attracts us will be the way of survival. Or undoing. Be careful, my friend, of this primeval force who is woman. (Report)Reply

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  • (9/13/2017 4:55:00 PM)

    we all look but see things differently oh how lucky we are my friend for the world would be a bore keep writing and open the worlds eyes (Report)Reply

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  • Chuy Amante (9/13/2017 4:15:00 PM)

    I'd be fine with the love of God being gravity
    That's the best theory yet

    thoughtful, keen words
    thanks!
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  • Gajanan Mishra (9/13/2017 8:30:00 AM)

    I call it love, love and love, the only truth, go on.. (Report)Reply

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  • Laurie Van Der Hart (9/13/2017 5:51:00 AM)

    A lovely love poem, Pratik. I like your earth and sun metaphor. I remember writing something similar when I was about your age. (Report)Reply

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (9/12/2017 6:18:00 PM)

    Welcome to Poem Hunter dot come dear Pratik. It is a beautiful poem on love through Sun and Planet having stunning expression. Let it be quoted...

    You have hold me with endless force from countless time.
    People call it gravity.
    I call it love.

    Yes, My love

    You are the Sun,
    And i am Planet.

    Many thanks dear Pratik, keep the ball rolling. Full Vote.
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    Pratik Rajani(9/13/2017 4:55:00 AM)

    thank you sir.....

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  • Edward Kofi Louis (9/8/2017 1:16:00 PM)

    The way of the day! With the muse of Gravity! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us. (Report)Reply

    Pratik Rajani(9/9/2017 1:03:00 AM)

    pleasure is all my dear edward

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  • Ramesh T A (9/8/2017 6:51:00 AM)

    Very simple and meaningful poem to read! Keep it up! (Report)Reply

    Pratik Rajani(9/8/2017 10:49:00 AM)

    Thank you Rameshjii...

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  • (9/8/2017 2:04:00 AM)

    A poem about love that keeps on going on. Simple penning of heartfelt love. (Report)Reply

    Pratik Rajani(9/8/2017 3:34:00 AM)

    thank you so much sarah...

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  • Rini Shibu (9/7/2017 10:56:00 AM)

    Superb poem pratik..
    You are the reason
    Why I have seasons
    People call it gravity
    I call it love... I liked the flow and the metaphor used..10
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    Pratik Rajani(9/8/2017 3:33:00 AM)

    thanks for big 10...
    Rini...

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  • Captain Cur (9/5/2017 10:13:00 AM)

    She holds you with the gravity of her love. Pratik, this is very heatfelt and nicely written poem about love. (Report)Reply

    Pratik Rajani(9/5/2017 12:06:00 PM)

    thank you captain..! !

    Pratik Rajani(9/5/2017 11:47:00 AM)

    Thank you captain.

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  • Sarah Persson (9/5/2017 8:56:00 AM)

    Nice poem of love, you may like to buy my book avaliable on Amazon, A Silver Lining (Report)Reply

    Pratik Rajani(9/5/2017 12:05:00 PM)

    thanks a lot sarah and surely i will look at silver lining.

    Pratik Rajani(9/5/2017 11:46:00 AM)

    Thanka a lot sarah. I will surely take a look at silver lining.

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, August 29, 2017



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