I walked to the door step
It was a sunny day
Uncle Johnny called me outside
I ran and passed the pine tree
Sun shimmered
Uncle Johnny waited for me...
Oh no! bloody tyrant sun rays
Touched my hand and face
I couldn't face up to it
My face turned red
Oh gosh! Sun burnt me....
My heart drowned, full of
Sadness and unshed tears....
I was excited!
I couldn't bear my wounds’ pain
O thou saddest day!
I wonder why the Sun
Burned me.....
Gloomed and doomed my life
Sun scorched me
Left its deadly marks on me
Aimed its rays to destroy me
Is this my life fate?
You have used a common situation to write a unique poem. Well done my freind.
Left its deadly marks on me Aimed its rays to destroy me Is this my life fate? ' really it made me go in deep thought..... yes every one wanna knw fate of life....words reflects a deep pain' regards
just like the sun, you shine because of your passion in poetry. See how powerful it can be when you, who is passionate enough to make such lovely poems frees your emotions? nice one. God bless!
hey dulakshi..... i liked the way u presented the sun...... v.gud keep it up
O thou saddest day! I wonder why the Sun Burned me..... Gloomed and doomed my life Sun scorched me Left its deadly marks on me Aimed its rays to destroy me Is this my life fate? its really a well written poem with innovative way of expression.. the best is your idea and expression and the way you wrote is very much poetic and soul feeling..lovely poem...10/10 ++++++++
Tragically beautiful.........How the story goes, in a rythmical pattern, going along of how the burnt thee.! 10 awesomeness
Hi Dulakshi: Enjoyed reading this poem thoroughly. A simple theme has been handled so well by you. Amazing! Keep on writing.
BEAUTIFUL POEM LIFE IS SUM TIMES PAINFUL WELL WRITTEN MY FRIEND
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Hi Dulakshi Beautiful poem... unique in its sense.... Sun would kiss you and bless you I enjoyed Thank you 10+