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The Ballad Of Sparta

Rating: 4.3

Men of old in shining armor,
Brand their swords and ride like thunder,
Cities quake; behold their tremor!
Xerxes turns toward Greece.

Men and women and starving children,
Run like fire and ne’er turn back,
Cities burn; behold their splendor!
Xerxes gives the word.

At his word those men in armor,
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Rosa Linger 14 June 2006

I love what I 'behold' in every stanza - kept me reading! ! Super use of short phrases to convey a vibrant picture! ! (this is Lynz by the way)

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Landrey 09 June 2006

I agree Bandwagon, this poem needs you to concentrate more on the meter than the rhyme, but I do love the outcome of the use of dead stops. no pun intended. -landrey

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Declan McHenry 08 June 2006

A brave take on a fine topic Jonzo although I feel the redress to rhyme constricts the flow. I did a free form piece on Thermopylae back in May entitled 'Strategos' that's still on this site. Quite different. Yours is a fine piece.

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Neat Bender 08 June 2006

A cool, contemporary take on the epic style. Someone else gave the 7, I don't vote, but it's better than that.

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