It is in the tomb of my mind
I write my deepest thoughts
The saddest of lines
Those dark truths we deny
Amongst that solitude, silence
A place to contemplate
Life
I like how you used tomb for thoughts in the mind. Sad thoughts are thoughts we want to bury but at the same time acknowledging them because we know they are there and part of us. When we are in solitude with our thoughts, we can better sought them out and understand them. Nicely done!
Many thanks this just came to me and for a while i wanted to push the poem further making it longer but fear it may have ruined the initial poem. thanks again
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I want to second Aqua Flowers comments and your own reply. The poem is just long enough the describe the subject but allows the reader to feel their own thoughts. A definite 10!
Thank you it means a lot when a poem is so well recieved