The Promise Poem by shilpi saxena
The Promise
When I was a little wench,
I thought the world is all fair.
Everybody is ready to help others,
No sadness, no tear.
When I became some old,
I feel something wrong.
Everyone is busy in themselves,
They only sing a selfish song.
Now I am living in my present age,
The ancient thoughts were arising.
But suddenly I found a shining star*
That is u, who are so inspiring.
Thou alters my views,
You show me the reality.
Now I believe there is someone,
Who ever takes care of me.
O! u are my peculiar friend,
Came into my life as a miracle.
Just like me you were also alone,
But now we are Friends Forever.
We will surely touch the welkin,
If we neglect the trifling things.
I Promise ever truthful to u and
Promise me to do the same everlasting.
have u written only one poem? I am sure that youy have ample caliber to reach the extreme.Try to go ahead stpo not till the goal is reached.
quite passionate write, yet ingeniously carved over rune of hope, keep on writing...
I am highly impressed by this excellent and well penned write which clearly reveals the very essence of FRIENDSHIP and LOVE! I honestly hope that this is your stepping stone towards your future in the Poetry World! You got what it takes to make it happen: TALENT! Go for it my friend! You are not alone. We are behind you to guide you! Keep inspiring the World, it is worthy! 10+++ Love and Peace for always! ..
So you wish to become am English lit. Prof.? I really don't get any pleasure telling you that first you better concentrate on syntax and grammar, very much I'm afraid. In your poem-just to point out a single item-you changed tenses twice in the first 2 lines. You have to learn consistency in that regard: it is quite important. Also, simply by meaning well does not a good poem make. Read, read, read, the greatest poets before beginning to write. I spent many years in the library reading hundreds of anthologies and individual compilations before I thought I could even begin without avoiding pretension.
A good start with a nice poem, Shilpi. You may like to read my poem, Love And Lust. Thank you.
Dear Shilpi this is a very nice combination of the gradual learning process in the world it is a mixture of good and bad. Thanks for sweet composition. I invite you to read my poems and comment.
Superb! .....................so loving lines............keep it up.
waww! What a passionate, emotional and loving poem, u get it good keep it up.
hey dear where r u now a days....why dont u wrote some more interesting poems... love the poem very much
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/18/2024 5:23:13 AM # 1.0.0.1119
thanks for depicting the selfish song of modern people......i'm longing for a friend like u hu knows the tender purposes of humanlife, , , , , will u b my frnd?