Their Fantastic Place Poem by Billy Loving

Their Fantastic Place

Rating: 5.0

Through the trees
Behind a swarm of bees
Lies a secret trail
They travel without fail
To a hidden land
Much too fantastic to understand
Following it's hills and bends
To meet with some old friends
Spending the day
In their usual way
New places to explore
It's wondrous creatures they adore
Pleasant conversation
Scrumptious meal, filled with elation
Their worries left behind
No troubles do they find
Quickly the time passes by
As they leave with a sigh
Setting a date to return
For it's solace they yearn
If only they could stay
Never again would they make their way
Back to a cold and callous place
It's memory they would erase
Their maudlin mood so clear
As through the trees they appear
Journeying back to their house
As quiet as a mouse
Through the window they sneak
Feeling so bleak
Some quiet words said
Hopping back in bed
By fatigue they're overcome
As to sleep, they rapidly succumb

Tuesday, September 19, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: children,escape
Bhargabi Dei Mahakul 20 September 2017

Wonderful observatory poem is presented on children and how they escape really. This is much too fantastic to understand. Wonderful poem is shared.10

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Prabir Gayen 24 February 2019

Beautiful poem dear poet...........\\\\\

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Bri Edwards 01 February 2018

today i plan to put your poem into my/our MARCH 2018 showcase, on my PH site, in my list of 'poems'. let me know if you object. i give poets their 'due' but no money! !

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Bri Edwards 07 January 2018

i did not catch the misspelling at first! ! ! ! Fantastic. unless you are just being playful/creative. i like it, but i think it is a typo. i don't want other readers to be learning 'wrong' spelling! bri :)

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Bri Edwards 07 January 2018

but the fact that you misuse it's (sometimes) causes me to be unsure in a couple of places whether you mean it is (it's) or belonging to it (its) . its breaks the general rule of making a possessive using an apostrophe. it is (it's) a common mistake of writers. bri :)

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Bri Edwards 07 January 2018

They oft travail** To a hidden land.....................** travail..................verb 1. engage in painful or laborious effort. perhaps you meant: traverse.......verb.......1. travel across or through. ? ? ? ? ? i like the rhyming and the story. to MyPoemList. welcome back? to PH. (to be continued) .....

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