I still remember the first day we talked,
My heart went jubilant.
You slowly came near and closer,
And undoubtedly stole my heart!
I find myself fortunate,
to be a small part of your life.
Till date, you're one of my finest mate!
The day you took my number
you made me crazy!
Each night we used to talk for hours and hours,
and you always made me feel special.
Sometimes when you said I love you,
I wish I could come by your side to give you a warm hug!
Sometimes when you said I Miss You,
I wish I could stay with you forever never leaving you.
Finally after 4 months you came,
When we could only see each other,
Without uttering a word to each other.
As few things weren't possible in our story!
At the 1st instance when I saw you in black,
You made me insane and lunatic.
My jaw was left open all wide,
I wished to quickly come at your side.
But since we kept our special relation as secret,
Nothing was possible!
My love and craziness for you started growing day by day,
When my name from Priya changed to Lovely.
My sweetheart I can't sleep a day,
Without hearing you!
Love, slowly I find you going
Far from me.
This was the only thing I wished
I could never see!
But now, I can just pray to God
To somehow bring my sweetheart back to me,
So that even I can proudly say,
'I too had a love story, I too had a Happy Ending'
I NEED YOU MY LOVE,
I MISS YOU MY SWEETHEART AND
I LOVE YOU MY BABY!
it's a great poem, the idea is there, just work on the flow of things...just keep on writing, i would love to hear more from you.
ah young love, full of emotions, longings and frustration toward the end. you have expressed your feelings well, not bad for starters but you need some rework on structure and the flow of words to make it an enjoyable read. keep writing my dear!
its beautiful, smart, lovable, and yet poignant too.... the words are beautifully put.....great work for first poem....hope to read more work from you.....thanks for sharing
good for your first write. that is exactly what its for is getting thoughts out and expressing yourself. summed up id say this is great work and you have real potential. keep writing
thank u everyone! n LOL ernest! : P thnx for being so sweet! n yes people i'l try to improve my writings! :)
people help me i forgot my email id! i need to write more poems too! : (help me plzzzz! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Wow wow can u be mine lol. Promise i never hurt. Its a wonderful work pls write more i cnt stop reading
Wow wow can u be mine lol. Promise i never hurt. Its a wonderful work pls write more i cnt stop reading
neatly written my dear keep writing endlessly, with such passion and you will bear me witness my dear, other have a lovely day!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I like it. Need to work on the flow but its a great first poem :)