Undone Poem by Dhear Vongjalorn

Undone

Rating: 4.1


The love of my life is a lie.
The dream that I dream says good-bye.
The path that i walk everybody mocks.
The way i speak nobody seeks.
The thoughts i think goes down the sink.
The way I turn the path there burns.Nobody respect who I am
I am one and I am Undone!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Adam Pinheiro 16 October 2009

from this, i see you expressing anger that people shott down your ambitions [the love of your life]. and i totally get that. ppl always tell me im too young to be writing a book or sumthing, or thinking the thoughts i do, but i cant help it. im me, and thats how it is. great write,10+

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Marieta Maglas 12 October 2009

very nice abstract poem, keep writing............

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Ouch, that's got to be terrible! I never really got over people who I found out were a lie. I thought I loved them until, I found out who they really were. Very expressive! Lovely poem!

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