Windswept Poem by Sandra Martyres

Windswept

Rating: 5.0


Her long tresses tossed in the air
Gave her a rather unkempt look
As she raced across the sands
In a daring attempt to challenge
The elements irrespective of
How strong they appeared
To the less adventuresome

Passers by clinging to each other
To avoid being blown away
By the treacherous winds
Stared in amazement at
The diminutive figure as she
Appeared to be racing against time
Defying the strong northerly winds

The seashore wore a deserted look
Apart from a few stragglers
Trudging along cautiously
But that did not deter the young lady
She continued with what looked like
A suicidal mission as the dark clouds
And huge waves made their appearance

When night fell she was less visible
The life guards were called in quickly
To make sure that she was not drowning
Huge flash lights and police cars
Appeared on the shore to confirm
That the young woman was still alive
But she seemed to have vanished

The rescue team opined that even
If she were drawn into the waters
The incoming tides would have returned
Her alive or dead to the seashore
In the distance they spotted an elderly man
Dressed in a well worn leather jacket
Sitting on a cliff smoking a pipe

The life guards rushed towards him
Hoping that he may have noticed her
But he merely raised his wrinkled face
To announce that their rescue operation
Had come twenty years too late
His daughter who had been swept away
By the seas usually visited him on a windy day

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Anand Madhukar 12 October 2009

A haunting tale brilliantly told. The twist in the tale at the end of the tail is exceptionally well executed.

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A real mystery with this one. I could feel the wind and see the sea with your wonderful narrative. We had a ghost in our last house, but I never saw it, but my husband did often. Great work Sandra.10 love Karin

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Michael Harmon 10 October 2009

A superlative supernatural narrative, Sandra, nicely told, and apropos for October (with the approach of Halloween) . :)

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Lady Grace 10 October 2009

a nice piece..a ghost is always be a ghost..

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Fay Slimm 10 October 2009

The sea, the shore and a ghostly girl - - all wrapped up in a verse of expressive narrative Sandra - - it thrills the reader with its flowing urgency and ends most surprisingly.... Fay

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Sandra Fowler 13 October 2009

Extraordinary. Your windswept girl is haunting and evocative, the very essence of a soul with wings. Reminds me a bit of, 'A Portrait Of Jennie', one of my favorite, classic films. 10/10. Love, SandraX

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Indira Renganathan 13 October 2009

The spectre and your knack....reading eyes still in big awe.....thank you...thanks for your comment on my poem too Sandra

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Maitreyee Joshi 13 October 2009

what an amazing tale with a surprise ending, ma'am! i fully enjoyed reading it.thanks for sharing.

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Carl Harris 13 October 2009

In this marvellous poem, as well as in your poem 'The Aftermath, ' your words were as sharp and clear as a digital photograph, Sandra, so vivid and expressive that it was a great pleasure to read this as well as your other poem. This fine write tells it's tale exceptionally well and features an absolutely splendid and eerie ending which enhances the entire poem. Your talent is awesome in both of these tremendously impactful and wonderfully written poems. Carl.

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Alf Hutchison 12 October 2009

Wow... what an ending... what a delightful read...I really loved it regards Alf

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