You There Poem by Asif Baloch

You There

Rating: 4.7


Hello There
yoooohoooo
You there
don't look here and There
yes you honey
I'm talking to you
these words thus written
is about you only you

coz you are the reason
we feel changing seasons
in lust and love
in lows and highs
in darkness and lights
in depths of tides

you make us feel
the fregrance thus heals
the injuries and scars
put by loneliness and thoughts

you are the one,
once told
who's words thus floats
like rhythm, like limes
soothern souls and minds
like dancing daffodils
like fragrance of rose

yes dear yes
you are that one
spreading words
of love and hope

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(this poem I wrote after being inspired by the poets in poemhunter and all others who's poems till now i have read......)

P.S. this poem is not about pleasing anyone, its about the feelings i felt after reading several poets............

COMMENTS OF THE POEM

Hi Asif, You must have know I like happy endings and am too ideallistic. But the word daffodil just colored my day to bright yellow sunshine. Your poem has strength and a little weakness (that you don't want to admit!) . Thank you Asif for sharing it. Karin Anderson

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Tissa Calvert 24 November 2008

very inspiring and heart felt plus shows and represents others not just you.

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Kallie Madison 24 November 2008

Lovely Poem! ! I enjoyed reading it! ! it's cool! ! keep on writing my friend! ! XOXO[KallieTRIGGER]™

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Naseer Ahmed Nasir 24 November 2008

As Sandra said, a good tribute to the poets on poemhunter. I feel the same way.

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Sandra Fowler 23 November 2008

A charming tribute to the poets on this site. Your appreciation is worth many tens. Kind regards, Sandra

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Shashendra Amalshan 10 August 2009

Hey youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu this is nice.. I like the word play here.. good.. different one indeed... nice to read! ! many tens.... Cheeerss! ! ! ! ! shash! !

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Mamta Agarwal 11 December 2008

the conversational style, in modern lingo catches the eye. expressive. aren't we all inspired by fellowpoets on ph. we are like an extended family..lovely, Asif. i wrote a poem, My dear friends on poem hunter. style different, you might like it.10 Mamta

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Kite Remedy 04 December 2008

That's an expressive write.. Beautifully assembled.. Nice..

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Sarwar Chowdhury 25 November 2008

Hello Asif! Its an WOW poem! Finely penned! 10+++

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Maryam Khan 25 November 2008

hmmmm---- what should i say about u? i m totally speechless. Asif u are just fantastic poet. its really very interesting, good and marvelous poem. thnx 4 sharing. 10+++++++++++++++++++++++.

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