racheal wiese


Young Love - Poem by racheal wiese

Like a flower in the blazing sun, this is how my love for you begun,
I was searching for something special for someone who was kind.
you were the picture i had in my mind,

you came along and swept me off my feet,
wen I am with you everything seems sweet,

the touch of your hand is like butter to bread i some times feel faint at the picture in my head.

I don't know why you loved me i don't understand why,
wen I sit and think of you, all I do is cry.
in my heart you show me all the things that were wrong the times we stuffed up we were together so long,

You made me a world were I was your girl,
wen u told me you didn't love me it was all in a twirl.
all the while my heart was aching, I didn't think i had one worth breaking..

You brang me love and a friendship with in, you gave me jewellery and lots of things but i don't think you gave me your true feelings within.

I don't know why I keep living this life full of sin, I gave my life to Jesus i wanted every thing to change did i do it for the wrong reasons a heap of pain still remains?

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  • (6/5/2008 9:54:00 PM)


    This is a nice poem, but it has many flaws. I like the message very much.
    But it wasn't conveyed effectively. I gave it a 7. This is one that can be improved
    and worked on I feel. I hope you will.

    GW62
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, April 1, 2008

Poem Edited: Tuesday, April 22, 2008


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