Stevie Taite

Rookie - 318 Points (30th January 1973 / Kent, England)

A Lesson On Poetry From My Five Year Old - Poem by Stevie Taite

I sat in bed one morning
With a note pad on my knee
When in wondered my Charlie
And he snuggled up to me

He said, 'You writing poems?
We are learning that at school
I know a lot about them'
I said, 'Really mate, how cool'

He stared at me intently
As he stretched out on the bed
His legs crossed at the ankle
And a hand propped up his head

After I had sorted through
And read back what I'd penned
He slid off of the bed
And peered up at me from the end

He stayed there quite transfixed
It kinda put me off my flow
I looked over my glasses
But he wasn't gonna go!

'Mum' he said ' has it got all
the things a poem ought
It should include good rhyme and rhythm
That's what I've been taught

Does it have some repetition
And patterns that are clear
What theme have you gone for? '
I smiled from ear to ear.

My Charlie, you've remembered well
It's Impressive, what you know
What else have you been taught then?
His face with pride did glow!

He ummed and arghed a little bit
To recall all he could
'Oh yeah, you need some 'wow words' too
They'll make it really good! '

I nodded with an 'oh I see,
Well thanks for all your tips'
He came and leant his head on mine
And kissed me on the lips

He left me to my writing
How adorable he'd been
And I put my first idea aside
And wrote one about him!

Poet's Notes about The Poem

True story folks (putting poetic licence back in wallet!)

Comments about A Lesson On Poetry From My Five Year Old by Stevie Taite

  • Stevie Taite (7/5/2016 4:51:00 PM)

    Thanks all for your kind comments. I have not been on PH for a few years now and this was an early poem, one that needs an edit (his face with pride did glow? You just can't get away with the syntax folks) . I still rhyme and enjoy form, but form with more of a challenge about it. The obvious end rhymes I do less and less. But I guess this one was part of a personal poetry journey and I should feel honoured to be picked for a poem of the day. Maybe I might post the odd poem now and then, and come by and visit the site for a look about. thanks again X (Report) Reply

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  • Jayatissa K. Liyanage (7/3/2016 11:18:00 PM)

    Quite natural and it ought to be one of the winning mode, in every one's heart. Thanks for sharing. Congrats for being the poem of the day. (Report) Reply

  • Gajanan Mishra (7/3/2016 10:50:00 PM)

    good one, thanks, I like it (Report) Reply

  • Bharati Nayak (7/3/2016 10:29:00 AM)

    I will surely add 'wow- - - -'to this poem.So lovely, so well written. (Report) Reply

  • Savita Tyagi (7/3/2016 9:49:00 AM)

    Love it. All those special moment of mother and child one could said it better but a mom. Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Marianne Reninger (7/3/2016 8:14:00 AM)

    a precocious child indeed! Loved the intimate look at a special mother and child moment! Congrats on your poet of the day! I had one last month, and its special..... (Report) Reply

  • Pamela Sinicrope (7/3/2016 7:54:00 AM)

    Love it! My kids give me their opinions and advice on my writing as well...and I had them all write me poems for mother's day. I enjoyed your write and the story that came along with it. Thanks for sharing and congratulations on poem of the day. Take care. (Report) Reply

  • (7/3/2016 7:09:00 AM)

    An excellent story poem woven around an outstanding theme of the bonding of a mother with her growing child.
    Heartiest Congratulations for composing such a nice poem as also on it's selection as Poem of the Day.
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  • (7/3/2016 7:07:00 AM)

    An excellent story poem woven around an outstanding theme of the bonding of a mother with her growing child. (Report) Reply

  • B.m. Biswas (7/3/2016 5:45:00 AM)

    What a story tense to poem.......wel written.......

    : -) congratulations..for member poet......Keep presenting...nurul.
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  • (7/3/2016 2:35:00 AM)

    it is hot and humid outside but your poem made up for everything! !
    a very pleasant and enjoyable read, you are obviously one who writes for pleasure and you do it so very well.
    congrats and thanks-10
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  • Pranab K Chakraborty (7/3/2016 2:00:00 AM)

    Good write. Beside this I suggest Charlie's school-learnt teachings are essential for the beginner's who want to understand poetry, but that is not sufficient for the poet of this time. Rather the revolt against rhyme and rhythm inspires and ignites the poet to create his/her own from the time of short past. Any way it's a good lesson for Charlie but not for Stevie Taite. Thank you all. (Report) Reply

  • Lyn Paul (7/3/2016 1:02:00 AM)

    Refreshing to read this beautiful poem from yours and your 5 year olds heart.
    Poem of the day and poetic license you have gained. Congratulations.
    Great to read you again Stevie.
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  • Edward Kofi Louis (7/3/2016 12:55:00 AM)

    And he kissed me on the lips! Thanks for sharing this lovely poem with us. (Report) Reply

  • Joe Hughes (5/26/2014 12:42:00 PM)

    Love that great, unexpected ending Stevie.
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  • Yash Shinde (4/3/2014 11:04:00 PM)

    .kids are really the most beautiful creation of god................this poem shows your love for them.......lovely.I invite you to read my poem-To bosom thee. I'll rise.........plzz do comment your views.. (Report) Reply

  • Kavya . (2/7/2013 4:07:00 AM)

    oh such a nice sweet poem about an innocent child, , , , Kids are Gods most beautiful invention that bring joy and smiles in our lives... (Report) Reply

  • (2/5/2013 9:26:00 AM)

    The poem is creditable being a true story. At times we are made to learn from our little children.The way you have handled him shows your great attitude towards children! VERY CAPTIVATING! (Report) Reply

  • Elizabeth Padillo Olesen (1/17/2013 2:51:00 PM)

    I just couldn't stop smiling while reading this from start to finish. What a great narrative poem which displays sensitivity and a seeming game from the fingertips of the writer. Really enjoyed reading. I would love to read more of your poems if I get time. Take care and keep on posting. (Report) Reply

  • Sandy Player (1/2/2013 10:32:00 AM)

    Funny-writing without being completely childish. He knows more about poetry than i do! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, November 12, 2012

Poem Edited: Wednesday, November 14, 2012

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