! ! ! A Story Of A Friend! ! ! Poem by kite remedy

! ! ! A Story Of A Friend! ! !

Rating: 3.0


'I found a love
while I was sitting
on a bench of a park
daydreaming
she was there
her eyes were not to me
but enjoying a Danish bread
so delightfully
I wished
she would look at me
and smiled
so I could reply
but not,
and she left shortly
oh, God
with her Danish
an afternoon
yes, it was an afternoon
when I found a love
but soon after it arrived
in my heart
it wasn't for long enough...'

P.S.: for my friend, i'm sorry if you mind i post your story as a poem. nevertheless, i just want you to know if it was your destiny, you'll find her somehow..

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Greenwolfe 1962 30 January 2009

I liked the story and most of the lines. The only one I didn't like was the last one. It ended with a whimper, not a bang. The story perhaps ended that way, but the poem doesn't have to. GW62

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Ravisankar Maitree 19 December 2008

Hi Kite remedy Nice your poem. I have same experience.

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