I look at you
In pure amazement
Like a tree
I stand in silence
Though in excitement
I shiver
I am without words
My emotions run deep
You greet me as the first ray
of sunlight
I enliven
My branches swing
As if to touch you
Inside me
I am flowering
My moment comes
When you come near me
Stand in my shade
We breathe together
When song birds sing
And the wind murmurs.
I see i was here a few years ago. This poem is also in your (and Daniel Brick's) book of poems, Poetry and Friendship. BUT I see no mention of friend/friendship in ANY of the poems' titles! AND I don't recall a menton of friends in your poems.
(Part-4) You can see some poems written by Daniel Brick were meant for his friend Paul, his Persian friend Baharak Barzin and also for me.
(Part-3) Initially I was in a dilemma whether to publish the book and sought permission from his son Ryan through PoemHunter message box.Since no reply came after waiting a long time I decided to publish the book.
(Part-2) Our initial plan was to put Daniel Brick's poem and my corresponding poem side by side and Daniel Brick would have provided some insight into chosing the related poems.That could not be, because Daniel Brick died even before chosing complete list.
Hi Bri, Thank you for your observation after reading poems from the book 'Poetry and Friendship' jointly written by Daniel Brick and me.(Part-1)
Bharati, It seems your supply of punctuatiom marks is depleted! At least you are consistent in using none that I see. bri : ) In this poem it did NOT bother me.
STANZA 2, LINE 1: 'I enliven' Would 'I awaken' or 'I come alive' fit as well or better? To me they do. :
"We breathe together"…I love that line! Glad you made the change! Good thing Bri Edwards is breathing too!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
1 - " We exchange breathe" maybe you meant " breath" ? Poet Poet uses breath in comment. Either one sounds a bit odd to me. :) how about 'greetings'? I assume " And murmurs the wind" is a poetic way of saying " And the wind murmurs" . if so, i like it. if not, i don't 'get it' aka understand it. ;) :) I'd like more than the ONE punctuation mark, and i'm not sure if you ARE a tree or a person.