Eila Mahima Jaipaul

Rookie (11/26/1971 / New York)

A Trickle Of Shadows - Poem by Eila Mahima Jaipaul

dreams
and thought came
in a trickle of shadows
melting if I tried to hold them too hard
but still you vanish like smoke
with a gust of air
and I remain alone
in bitter darkness
trying to fight the wind
endlessly tumbling
in the icy void
knowing I'll
never find you again.


Comments about A Trickle Of Shadows by Eila Mahima Jaipaul

  • Peter Lebuhn (2/11/2006 9:47:00 PM)


    This is one of my favorites but the abscence of I would make it stronger.
    Make it sound like what is written is happening NOW
    As you know this is the trick to writing to capture the reader
    You have captured me with your work
    I do enjoy it. It is relaxing

    Namaste

    Peter
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, January 5, 2006



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