NEETHA SASIDHARAN

Rookie - 107 Points (25-03-1996 / KERALA)

At His Tombstone.... - Poem by NEETHA SASIDHARAN

hello ma....

i knew u would be here
and kick off those tears
like u used to do
when i was hurt.


i'm fine and well
and ma, a lot to tell.
so you better sit
if the grass is neat.

i was scared when i came,
then someone called my name
n MA! IT WAS HIM...I SAW MY DAD.....
he is so big and hard.
anyway, without you, it's not the same..

i asked why he went so early..
he smiled and hugged me tightly.
-he went up so early so that
when i come, i won't be a lonely cat.
oh ma....he is so lovely...

hey? why those tears? ? ?
i love it when your eyes are clear...
oh no..both of you are the same
cuz whenever i say your name,
his eyes also water....

ma, here we have a garden n lots of flowers,
like those in your salwars.
but not like those in our yard
n to pluck it is hard
cuz they are so tall like tower.

so next time you come,
our wee white roses, get me some.
i will plant them here so that,
i will make a pretty white hat
of roses when you come..

and ma, now i know why
i and dad came early....
you won't be alone when you come
and we'll be happy in this home...

love you ma..........


(((((plz read the poem after reading the story...))))))

Topic(s) of this poem: death


Poet's Notes about The Poem

first she lost her husband to the hands of death and now it took away her only boy(5 yrs old) ...On his first death anniversary, when she went to keep the flowers and pray, ....this is wat her baby said....

Comments about At His Tombstone.... by NEETHA SASIDHARAN

  • Dr.tony Brahmin (9/23/2015 12:43:00 PM)


    i asked why he went so early..
    he smiled and hugged me tightly

    and ma, now i know why
    i and dad came early....
    you won't be alone when you come
    and we'll be happy in this home... These last verses of your great poem touched me very very much. thank you
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  • Bri Edwards (5/24/2015 7:30:00 PM)


    “its not the same..” ….. maybe your “its” is your shorthand notation for “it’s”? ? or you just make the mistake others make, not using the apostrophe?

    “when i come, i won't be alone.” is the speaker/daughter? planning to die soon?
    “anyway, without you, its not the same” ………… is the “you” here, the mom or dad?

    “his eyes also waters...” …………personally I would say “water”.

    OH! ! now I see the note your left at the end of the poem; it would have been better at the start of the poem, IF you wanted readers to read your ‘story’/poet’s notes BEFORE reading the poem. it WOULD help the readers to follow/understand the poem, BUT I FOUND that, after reading the last stanza, I finally understood the whole poem, some of which I did NOT understand before the ending.

    [I also find that the speaker is a son, not a daughter.][I think I fell into the trap of thinking the speaker was the author, YOU! ]

    “i was scared when i came, ” ………. for example, I thought this line meant “when I came to the cemetery to visit my father’s grave”. now I understand that the speaker also had died and went wherever the father had gone at death. very interesting!

    I like the poem very much and am sure some others will like it even more, once they understand it.
    favorite lines:

    “i was scared when i came,
    then someone called my name
    n MA! IT WAS HIM...I SAW MY DAD.....
    he is so big and hard.
    anyway, without you, its not the same..”

    and:

    “and ma, now i know why
    i and dad came early....
    you won't be alone when you come
    and we'll be happy in this home...

    love you ma..........”

    to MyPoemList. bri :)
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    Neetha Sasidharan Neetha Sasidharan (5/25/2015 12:24:00 AM)

    thnk u so much 4 those valuable comments...

  • Claudia Krizay (1/16/2013 6:08:00 AM)


    Neetha- What a beautiful poem! ! I think the title is very good! ! I love this- good work.
    your friend,
    Claudia
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    Neetha Sasidharan Neetha Sasidharan (5/25/2015 12:25:00 AM)

    thnk u so much aunty....feel so gud to hear this frm a poet whom i admire so much....

  • Valsa George (12/14/2012 10:28:00 PM)


    Wow! ! ! ! ! ! So beautiful Neetha...! . So moving a tale leaving a lump in our throats! ! Great, my dear! Now it is my turn to say- I am proud of you..... This deserves a 10! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Dr Library @ Debadarshi (12/11/2012 4:06:00 AM)


    This piece of writing again defies to those who believe in age! ! ! ! ! ! ! here is the example, who can write at such a lucid, convincing rhythm, with beautiful, vivid imagery......
    hats off.....
    keep writing.......
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  • Rigzin Namgyal (9/15/2012 5:00:00 AM)


    ..well written..loved it...nice creative imagination.. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, August 21, 2012

Poem Edited: Wednesday, June 21, 2017


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